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Poetry
Dreams
By bloodange77
12 October 2006
I wrote this during my algebra 2 class in school so if it is choppy i will explain. I did it during a test so it might not be so great. But i liked it anyway.

Dreams dashed;
Hopes forgotten;
Love wasted;
Nights lost;
Days blurred;
But in the haze;
You find the way;
Back to sunsets;
Moonlit nights;
Home by dawn;
Vast misty lake;
Candlelit dinners;
And all the dreams;
You left behind.

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Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 12th October 2006
Hope the test went well. 
 
There's something really good here. I preferred the short snappy lines at the beginning to the rest. I'm no expert, but with work, I think this could be a great piece. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 14th October 2006
As with Phil, there is something good here but it gets lost a little towards the end. Could be really powerful with a bit of an edit I think. 
 
Elli

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