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Moy Mell
By MarjoryBanks
12 October 2006
An adaptation from the ancient tale of Connla and the Fairy Maiden.

Sweet Connla of the flaming hair,
Ruddy as the dawn of day,
Of regal form and features fair,
To Moy Mell sail with me away.
Royal, worthy son of Conn,
Hero of the Hundred Fights,
My crystal curragh climb upon,
Let us sail from Usna’s heights.
In Boadag’s realm our bed awaits,
Lined with softest down of swan,
A welcome at the golden gates,
A magic horse to ride upon.
There we’ll love for evermore,
For time and tide abide there not,
Nor ill, nor pain, nor war, nor gore,
And mortal worries are forgot.
So let us for the pleasure plain,
Set our sails without delay,
The sun is sinking in the sea,
Yet we can swiftly make our way.
Within my crystal boat of love,
Let’s kiss and hold in tight embrace,
As gentle shines the moon above
We'll safely reach that magic place.

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Excellent
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 12th October 2006
In my opinion your poem is excellent, and the rhythm and rhyming good, but I think you could improve it if you indented the rhyming lines, and divided it up into verses with four lines in each. It would sit on the page better. You've handled the story very well, chosen a good title, and it reads well. Your English is good and words well chosen. I think you kept your readers interested and the poem comes to a gentle conclusion. I would say "Well done!"
Thank you Josie!
Written by MarjoryBanks (14 comments posted) 12th October 2006
You are too kind! 
 
The ancient gaelic bards didn't tend to split their stories up into stanzas and verses, so I've decided to follow suit with this series of works. I see what you mean though. 
 
Its just wonderful to have feedback from such an accomplished poet! I visited your website and was astonished! Have you been published, worked for TV or won competitions? I'll be astonished if you tellme you have not! 
 
Thanks again, 
 
Marge :)
a muintirna hEireann
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 12th October 2006
Beautiful writing, Madge. I know the 'Tale of Connla' as it is the tale of my own lineage. I would love you to have continued. Love to hear some more. 
 
Let me ask you not to pay heed to Engilsh insistence on regimentation of your creativity according to their own criteria. Remember the English took our land; our country; our homes and children and anything else they could lay their murderous hands on. Now hEireann is her own proud mistress; don't go 'cowtowin' t' allowin' ' them to dictate how we should speak. Arrogance beyond forgiveness!! What do they know of the way of speaking of the Gael!? FA.  
 
Slan!

Written by Phil (6387 comments posted) 12th October 2006
English(ish) but loved it - and loved it as it was. I'm no technician when it comes to poetry, but I don't think you need to accentuate rhyme for the sake of it. In this case the story is the most important with the richness of the language running a close second. 
 
Just another Enlish(ish) opinion. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil. 
 
English(ish) - very mixed, mainly Celtic ancestry.

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