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Indifference
By bfb09
15 October 2006
No more pain it’s receding

And there I am pleading

For more drugs

More things to numb

This heart diseased love


I take a knife

I take a stab

Just below my shoulder

Left of my lung

Did I hit my target

Or miss my chance again?

You stare at me with vacant eyes

A dark expression underlies

Those whispered lullabies

Your name’s a misnomer — Angel

Reviews
Very expressive
Written by Jay (12 comments posted) 15th October 2006
This is very emotional, certainly on target with that. Struck a chord, I wish you sweeter dreams. 
Jay

Written by Phil (8698 comments posted) 15th October 2006
Strong echoes of 'Comfortably Numb' by Pink Floyd. 
 
I think I'll come back and read this. 
 
Phil.
Comfortably Numb
Written by Talisker (1367 comments posted) 16th October 2006
By Pink Floyd. Great song...although I prefer the early Barrett stuff. 
 
You do take the notion on in your own way though. 
 
My fave line in the actual song is "my hands feel just like two balloons"...Brilliant.  
 
Oli 
 

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