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The End of the Affair
By brolgablue
19 October 2006
Have dinner with me?
At my place? I can cook you know.
Hunger sated,
Relaxing in his arms.
Warmed by that enticing red,
I give up myself to his charm.


He leads me to his room,
My head is spinning.

His body is firm and tanned
He knows all the moves
His lips find all my secret places
And I am released.


Sleep overcomes, then morning dawns.
Waking lady stretches, yawns.

Alone in crumpled sheets I hear
Kitchen noises, clattering plates
And bubbling kettle call.



My first breakfast with my new love.
Aromas of fragrant coffee, bread toasting
Awaken my senses.
Dreamily I take my place at his table.
"Oh!", he says,
“You are a butter digger,
not a butter scraper”.

Reviews
down to earth ...
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 18th October 2006
... so often with a thump. 
 
And it is not the bigthings that grow to be important . It is the little events that dig in and stick like burrs 
 
patterjack
Butter digger?
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Its a new classification to me. Ah, I see - is this like annoying foibles.  
 
How many secret places do you have? Silly me, its a secret! 
 
At least you seem to be "getting some" - JEALOUS I AM! 
 
Nice poem. 
 
Oli

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Enjoyed this. The first two lines were particularly good - also finished very well. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Jay (12 comments posted) 20th October 2006
Excellent ending to this - really effective change from sated and dreamy to the cold light of day. Hope being a butter digger isn't a deal breaker!! 
Best wishes, 
Jay

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