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How we deal with it
By alandavidpritchard
19 October 2006
They threw stones at us,
Threw rocks and boulders,
Bricks and logs,
Toasters, a hairbrush,
Plus a lot of crap we didn’t need, or couldn’t use.
Take that, they shouted,
And that and that and that!
 

They even wrote letters of complaint
-        in the strongest possible terms -
and would have demonstrated
had the weather been less miserable.
 

They go to bed seething and sneering at us.
 

And when it gets really bad,
And the elements conspire outside –
We toast marshmallows,
And keep warm,
Brushing each other’s hair
In our little home
Made with boulders, bricks, logs and stone.

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Not unpleasant
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 19th October 2006
But thicko that I am, I don't have much of a clue what its about. 
 
You have a nice, straightforward way with words though Alan. 
 
Oli

Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Really enjoyed the words, but like Oli, I'll have to wear the dunce's cap on this one. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Jay (12 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Am probably wrong but I think I'd go with the whole what doesn't kill you makes you stronger theme, thought the imagery evoked was very strong and made me smile to think that you'd get one over on them using the very sticks they beat you with!! 
Best wishes 
Jay

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 19th October 2006
lol....of all the poems i have written this is the easiest to understand...simply that we have turned their tools of hate into objects of affection....i really didnt think this was that difficult to figure out..thanks for the comments all...it's well appreciated 
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Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Whose tools of hate? Or do you think it doesn't matter?  
 
Its slightly patronising to say that we can't understand your "easiest" poem! It doesn't say much for us, eh? 
 
The fact is, you understand it, because you wrote it. I know Phil, and he's far from stupid. Hopefully, I'm not completely thick. Depends what you want from your verse, to communicate, or just for personal satisfaction? 
 
Oli

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 19th October 2006
no offence meant i can assure you..was simply responding to the comments 
i do not doubt the intelligence and wisdom of the readers at all and apologise if the tone was considered patronising... 
it needs to be rewritten then so the intention can be made clear 
regards 
alan

Written by michaelangelo (13 comments posted) 19th October 2006
i really enjoyed reading this. i thouht it was clear where it could go so the end made me smile, nice one! and i agree u have a straighforward way with words :)

Written by michaelangelo (13 comments posted) 19th October 2006
i really enjoyed reading this. i thought it was clear where the message was going so it made me smile reading the end. nice one! and i agree it was nicly straightforward

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