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neither will tomorrow
By alandavidpritchard
19 October 2006
a poem about loss...the second time around
this poem is entirely fictional...and a variation of a theme in a poem by robert frost

This may not feel like the best time,
but neither will tomorrow.

We’ll fumble through this
somehow, borrow
what we can from yesterday’s
leftovers: a row here,
a mood-plunge there. Sorrow,
worn like threadbare overalls
grown and sewn into,
has served us well before.

Our second – gone; nights too long
to wade through; the song
of unbearable silence –
this, these –
Oh, God, I know, I know, I know.

I’m here, baby, take my hand.
Turn from the stones, stand close,
stand.

This may not feel like the best time –
But neither will tomorrow.


 

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Best of the three..
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Personal, steeped in emotion. Rounded. 8/10 and a bronze star for Alan. 
 
Are you writing these now, or do you have a store of angsty poems? 
 
Oli 
 

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Certainly the best of the three. I assume this is a personal response to tragedy, so just to say, very well put together. The emotion shows through very strongly. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Jay (12 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Another well written emotive piece, I do enjoy your style. I did prefer the theme of the last one which seemed to take adversity and work with it, but that's because this one cuts too close to my own feelings on life at the moment, I certainly wish you and yours a better tommorrow 
Jay

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 19th October 2006
Did I miss that in the intro the first time, or is it an addition? Quite relieved anyway, Phil.

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 19th October 2006
nah added the extra bit in the intro later..the poem actually started off life ending with the words:  
RIP TIddles 1999-1999 
but i changed my mind...lol 

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