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Hide and Seek
By Gill21
20 October 2006
This was partly inspired by a very haunting and beautiful song (Hide and Seek) written by a favourite artist of mine, Imogen Heap. The other part was inspired by the fact that i find it almost impossible to open a newpaper anymore without feeling angry, confused and distressed. As a result this was just as difficult to write (being so emotionally involved makes it hard to be eloquent, when you're at the point of being almost numb with horror). 
This is just a first draft. Comments appreciated.

Where are we?

What do you see?

What the hell is going on?

This can’t be happening.

A child is huddled along the streets, tripping relentlessly on unfamiliar potholes and jumping over the streams of sewage that run by her feet. Others are darting in between road and sidewalk traffic trying to trade their merchandise in hope of feeding their families. Black marks splatter the sides of buildings like symbols of death. Shouts, cries and chaotic city noise embodies the stale humid air creating multiple invisible obstacles in the path of humanity. Such sights of poverty and mayhem are not unfamiliar to the small child, who stares at me wide and glossy eyed whilst she shivers and shakes with terror and sorrow.

A teenager stares out the window of her school into the dusty fields. A loud crack punctures the still air and she spins, motionless. A tear glides down her warm cheek as she sees the field filled with scarecrow like fixtures. Angry flames licking at their feet as vultures leer in from the perimeters and cackle with supercilious superiority. By the time she climbs off the roof, and lands on the still cracked earth, she has lost her father and fifteen relatives. In one invasion, she is alone.

A dirty pale room is a mess with bodies, and barely breathing with only whimpers coming from the small children occupying this solemn space. Tubes hang from their flared nostrils and they hold their frail and baby like hands out in welcome. Their chest’s heave making them appear like sides of meat not yet at rest. Their eyes, as brown as conkers, smile bright, hopeful and full of courage. A tired looking woman hands a small bottle half full of a milky substance to a young boy who appears to be asleep. He does not open his eyes, but suckles at the teat. She smiles tiredly and reaches for a bottle of pills, standing lone on a tin vessel.

Streets are awash with blood and the sky is turning pink. Streams of violence slither through the dust and debris paving the way for another massacre of ill understanding and intolerance. The good turn to bad, the bad turn to worse, and the rest are left for dead. No tangible object shall escape the serpent inching its way towards them. They must flee while they can, or get caught in the line of fire.

A woman crawls out of her leech infested tent and washes in the stream with her comrades. She then loads her rifle, and sets about her day.

Crowds cower as they pass the empty void now holding black veils of grief over their city. The sun never shines for long and dust continues to fall, laying crop circles on the concrete.

A boy is abused, and then given a bag of five pence pieces for the privilege.

"oily marks appear on walls
where pleasure moments hung before the take over,
the sweeping insensitivity of this still life"

Spin me around again, and count to ten.

This can't be happening.

A legacy of shattered lives, and innocence lost.

A twisted game of Hide and Seek.


Reviews
Hi Gill
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th October 2006
The trouble is that there are no "good guys" and never have been. Everbody should read Chairman Mao's little red book and when you do so you can no longer look at the world in terms of black and white. 
 
I've read it, I didn't become a Maoist but I realised that there are no moral heights on a dung heap. Might is Right. 
 
You would seem to have captured the random chaos of such events. Certainly a distrurbing and memorable read, 
 
Brian
Depressing...
Written by Snodlander (501 comments posted) 20th October 2006
... but oddly beautiful phrases. Somewhere between prose and poetry. 
 
The world, and especially the world of international politics, is mind-numbigly depressing, and I often wonder whether my kids will ever forgive me for their inheritance. But the world also contains amazing examples of what is noble, often in the midst of the most terrible. 
 
My brother is a clown. He often does shows for kids in conflict zones. He sees the absolute worst and absolute best, often at the same moment.  
 
All the time people like us care, there is still hope.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 20th October 2006
Hi Gill.  
 
Beautifully written piece. The power in this comes from your clear writing and refusal to delve into the emotions of the people you write of. 'Tired' was about as close as you got to a description of mental state. In relating the scene only, it leaves no room for dispute or disagreement. The emotion is all with the reader - this one anyway. As Snoddy said, very close to poetry at times. The beauty of your words also counter point the awful scenes you describe. 
 
Your best piece to date, I think. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
Like Phil...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 21st October 2006
Really good piece,Gill. I have only just caught up with it but it is certainly one of the best I have seen from you. I have no reservations I can think of. Phil is spot on the nose when he says its the clarity of prose the makes it so powerful a read. I really enjoyed it and it is so refreshing to see a writer who came so gingerly onto the GW site really begin to turn out some quite arresting work 
 
So very well done. I look forward to more from you. 
 
Slan!

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 22nd October 2006
You have conjured up some terrible vivid images here. and the sharp,journalistic style adds to the power. I found the lack of context make the work even more disturbing 
Really great writing 
cheers 
BBS
Thanks one and all
Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 23rd October 2006
Hi everyone, thank you for reading and reviewing. I wasn't sure i had succeeded with this one so have found all your comments really encouraging. 
 
Brian- thanks for the shout out in wacky jill, and there are good guys. Just few and far between in the scheme of things and difficult to be heard over the corruption. 
 
Snolander- thanks for your kind words and the injection of hope. 
 
Gerard- thanks for your kind words also, they are very encouraging. 
 
Jane- Thank you also for reading and reviewing :)
Beautiful
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 23rd October 2006
Hi Gill 
 
It's all been said above really. This is a really powerful piece of writing, all the stronger for its understatement of emotion. Tremendous. 
 
Elli
Dark and Poignant
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 23rd October 2006
And very well wrote dear girl, very well wrote indeed.  
 
You have a way with the words that is not common, and a humanity shines through the gloom. Very evocative, could have been mawkish, but you somehow avoid this. 
 
We are privileged, Gill, pure and simple! 
 
Oli :)  
 
P.S. It feels like a heresy to point out, but "awash" is one word. ;)
Elli and Oli
Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 23rd October 2006
Elli- thanks for the kind review, i am glad you enjoyed it. 
 
Oli- my my don't often see you venturing over here. Thank you also for your kind review. ('awash', duly noted). 
 
:)

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