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The Ones that Came Before
By Witzl
21 October 2006
If you ever try to work out your family tree, prepare to be amazed. You start out with your four grandparents, then your eight great-grandparents and your great-greats -- and pretty soon you see that we are all backed by a cast of thousands. We don't even know these people and yet, if even one hadn't been in his or her place along the chain, we would not be here. This was written with an American audience in mind, but genealogy is amazing no matter where you are from.

(One minor point: I used 'who' instead of 'whom' in the last stanza. I know the rule, but 'whom' sounded pompous here.)

THE ONES THAT CAME BEFORE

 

A legion came before us, that and more

First two, then four, then double that and soon

The numbers swell till we can hardly count

Those faceless thousands that gave rise to us

 

And whether on foul ships, heartsick and tired

Or banished from their native lands in chains

Or ventured here across the frozen wastes

All joined now in our tapestry of life

 

We still see fleeting traces of the ones

Whose bodies lie beneath us and whose bones

Enrich the soil we walk on and whose songs

Died in the woods and rivers, but live on

 

Their faces are reflected even still

Their voices ring in laughter, waft in sighs

The paths their toughened feet have beaten out

Lie somewhere even still beneath the dust

 

Our cities rise and sparkle, boom and clang

And factories churn out busy-ness and sound

We travel now through mazes, furious

In tangles ever circling, never still

 

Where in that chain, then, how far back are we?

That far-flung human chain of ancestry

Who will we nourish, who will we inspire?

What will we leave them, where will our trails lead?

 

 

 

  

Reviews

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 21st October 2006
Loved this one as it's something I think about a lot. Not genealogy as such, just my place in a long chain of humanity.  
 
I particularly liked verses three and four. There's always going to be something we leave behind, through our children or otherwise. 
 
I think this is one I'll come back to a few times. 
 
Hit the spot with me, 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 21st October 2006
Excellent!  
 
I had finished reading this before I realised it didn't rhyme. Your word selection is so naturally skillful that there is a lyricism that lends a rhyming quality - superb! 
 
I tried to research my family tree, but found that most of them are still living in it! :grin

Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 22nd October 2006
I liked the rhyming quality without actually having any rhyme scheme! The words were simply chosen yet effective and graceful too. I only stalled abit with the second line from the fifth stanza but maybe I'm not reading it correctly.  
 
All the best 
 
Francoise

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