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Mum's The Word
By oxy
25 May 2005

A family is just like a cart wheel,
and the hub of the wheel is the mum,
and when things go wrong, it's not before long
that its mother to where they all run.

Your mother's the one that protects you
who nurtured and fed you from birth,
she is the one, that for daughter or son
would go to the end of the earth.

She might not be that good at spelling
and at maths she's not very bright,
but when it comes to good sense,
don't sit on the fence,
admit that your mums always right.

Your mother knows just what she's doing
when she lets dad think he is boss,
If she wasn't there, he'd shout and he'd swear,
and he knows that he'd be a dead loss.

So always look after your mother
show her that you really care,
give her the best, and thank God you where blessed
with a mother who always was there.

Reviews
So, are you going to work for Hallmark C
Written by Nearlypastit (50 comments posted) 26th May 2005
Be honest!!! The rythmn is accomplished, as is the delivery and bredth of language. 
 
The subject matter however means that either you are a mother, or just became a dad (there is logic in that, I am a dad) or, or you really do intend to put this on your CV and march off the the card manufacturers. 
 
Call me sentimental...
Written by oxy (28 comments posted) 26th May 2005
but I wrote this firstly in remembrance of a wonderful childhood with fantastic parents, they had no money but had lots of love. 
Secondly, as a father who through illness missed my children's childhood but watched with great pride my wife cope with the pressures of bringing up a family and looking after me. 
Thirdly, I just love trying to write poetry and hope to bring a smile on the faces of the people who read my words (I would not call it work because its a great pleasure for me.)
That's a much better reason than my two
Written by Nearlypastit (50 comments posted) 26th May 2005
Still say you should be working for a card company though! 
 
As for missing your children growing up; well mines only 19 months old and I couldn't bare the thought of missing a moment, so I understand that point perfectly. 
 
Mum's the word
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 6th June 2005
Well done Oxy - My mother died when I was 8 and I never had a replacement but I understand the sentiments. This is work we can all understand.

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