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The World Under my Bed
By Witzl
24 October 2006
I was tempted to enter this under 'Non-Fiction' or perhaps 'Crime and Horror.' I certainly wish the part about snails was fiction.

 

THE WORLD UNDER MY BED

 

You won’t believe this, but I’ve got

A world beneath my bed

There’s socks and shoes and magazines

And books I’ve never read

 

There’s sweetie papers there and all

the stuff that I’ve forgot

My gym kit’s there, all wadded up

(Or wait – maybe it’s not. . . )

 

The snails that I brought home one day

(They’re kind of all dried up)

My sister’s tennis racket, too,

Mum’s favourite coffee cup

 

Banana peels and apple cores

And plastic bottles too

And sandwich ends I didn’t eat

(All grey and mouldy – phew!)

 

There’s stuff that I’ve brought home from school

That no one’s ever seen

(No way they’re going to see it now

‘cause it’s all wet and green)

 

There’s shirts and pants and jeans – and oh –

My stupid-looking tie

(Mum says I’ve got to clean my room

But hey, I’d rather die)

 

And everything is covered with

A half a foot of dust

(Except Mum’s hammer and her wrench

-- they’re covered all in rust)

 

At night when I get into bed

It is a little tricky

I have to jump from three feet back

(The floor there’s not so sticky)

 

I lie there in the deep, dark night

And thoughts go through my head

It’s kind of scary when you’ve got

A world under your bed

 

 

Reviews

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 24th October 2006
Sorry! I've only just realized that I submitted this under 'Poetry' when I meant to put it in the 'Children' Category. The cat was in my lap and her tail got in my way. . .

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 24th October 2006
Have you been snooping in my eldest's room? Probably not, as you didn't mention the smell. I think kids would enjoy this. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 24th October 2006
Thank you, Phil. 
 
My kids didn't, actually. They seemed to think that my posting this is close to being actionable. They feel that other Great Writing members may imagine that I was describing their rooms and conclude from the poem that they are less than pristine in their, ah, room hygiene.  
 
The enjoyment was all mine. . .

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 24th October 2006
If they're anything like mine, tell them you've gone easy on them. I'm sure when I was that age I was perfect.... 
 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
giggle
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 29th November 2006
much much fun, I like it lots. Brackets were a little weird to start wiht, but they grew on me =) 
 
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