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Trick or Treat 3
By BrianRobertNeal
25 October 2006
I was letting this quietly slip away when Elli reminded me of it.

Trick or Treat-Three.
 

Wizz Kid- I’m sorry to phone you this late sir, but I’ve some bad news about the missing “Trick or Treaters”.
 

Super-Go on then.
 

WK-When I extended the search to cover an area within 60 miles of our Police Station, I found there had been nine such cases. The first was in 1997 and then one each year up to and including last year.
 

Super-Why was this not picked up?
 

WK-Because sir, they involved four different Police Authorities. They were apportioned between the four authorities so that there was never more than one every three years. Seven of the missing persons were found murdered and two are still missing.
 

Super-Is that it?
 

WK-No sir, at about 8 o’clock a Woman phoned in to say her son had gone missing. He’d gone to meet friends at the local supermarket and they were going to go trick or treating. The Child’s nine, small and tubby and was wearing a pointed hat, cloak and his face was painted.
 

A full search is in progress.
 

Super-Stay where you are, I’m coming back to the Station.
 

When the Super arrived back he found WK scrolling through the details held on the various Police Computer Files.
 

Super-How’s it going WK.
 

WK The seven who have been found were all on building sites, in derelict buildings or in one case a builder’s yard. They’d all been strangled, but and this is odd, they were dead before they were strangled. They’d been poisoned.
 

One pathologist noted that the physical abuse had also occurred after death and seemed almost a token assault.

Super-Meaning what.
 

WK-That the killer wanted to give the impression that he was a sexual pervert.
 

Super-Right WK, home you go and I’ll see you tomorrow. I mean it, come on, there’s nothing we can do. I’m going home.
 

On his return the next morning the Super found a note on his desk
 

Super,
 

All leave has been cancelled and the Specials called out.
 

The Boy’s journey to the Supermarket had been witnessed.
 

Many people had seen him in the Car park. 
 

He was last sighted talking to a man outside 30 Wright Road, he had been no more than 300 yards from his home.
 

Then he disappears.
 

30 Wright Road has been empty for 3 months, then a man claiming to be the late owner’s nephew had moved in two days ago. He and his car are now missing. It’s number plates were false and it might have had a recent respray.
 

WK
 

The PC who was the Super’s “Leg Man”, reported for duty.
 

PC- “Morning Sir, shall I let the nutter go”
 

Super- “No let’s pay him a visit.”
 

They went down to the cells and the Duty Officer let them into the “Nutters” Cell.
 

Super-Morning Sir, hope you slept well.
 

Man-Very well thank you, and now I can go I suppose.
 

Super-Well sir, we can’t let you go because we don’t know who you are or where you live. So answer a few questions and sign a release form and you can go.
 

Man-Oh well OK.
 

Super-Constable you’ve got the release form, just ask the relevant questions will you.
 

PC- Your name sir?
 

Man-Oliver Riddles.
 

PC-Address sir?
 

Man-16 Wright Road.
 

PC-Occupation.
 

Man- Pharmacist.
 

PC-I’ll have the form typed up, get you to sign a copy and then you can go.
 

Super-Well it worked.
 

Man-What worked?
 

Super-Keeping you locked up in here. For the first time in ten years a child has not been abducted and murdered.
 

Now when we had the other chap locked up we weren’t so lucky.
 

Was it his turn, had you got fed up with all the killings, did you say “It was your bloody mother, so you kill ‘em”.
 

We’ve got him, he’s confessed, he’s even told us where the two that have not been found were hidden.
 

Man-Stupid Bastard, he couldn’t even manage one killing. That Edward Thompson always was a bloody mummy’s boy.
 

Super-Who sir, we don’t have an Edward Thompson in custody. Do we sir?
 

Man-No you don’t, but he did all the killings and I was always locked up in here.
 

Super-What was your role then?
 

Man- I’d supply the drugs, then move the body from the first hiding place to the final one. They knew nothing, they got sleepy, then passed out and died. Charlie boy would be doing magic tricks, so they died laughing.
 

Super, “Charlie Boy?”
 

Man- That was his nickname Cheerful Charlie Harry Elkington.
 

Super-Would you like to a make a full confession Sir.
 

Man-Yes.
 

Super-PC keep the gentleman company and I’ll arrange for an interview room for you to make your statement in.
 

The Super went out and up to Wizz kids’ Office.
 

WK-Morning sir
 

Super-Morning WK, do a search on a Harry Elkington will you.
 

WK-I’ll do a wide sweep, convictions, licence applications, security clearance and then the Electoral role. Nothing on convictions, I’ll enter multiple choice, Henry,Harry,Hal, Harold. Still nothing, License Applications, nothing, security clearance, got him, he has been cleared for work involving children, apparently he’s a full time children’s entertainer.
 

Super-Get him picked up.
 

About an hour later a man dressed as a Comedy Tramp was brought into the station. He was taken into Interview Room B by the Super and Wizzkid. They were joined by the Duty Solicitor. The formal warning was given.
 

Super-So Harold Edward Elkington you are charged with the kidnap or/and Murder of 10 young boys/adolescents. Each offence occurred on the 31st October, at yearly intervals. It’s no use denying it; your Accomplice Oliver Riddles has made a fully detailed statement.
 

HE-I do not deny killing nine of them. If the tenth was last night, I did not kill the tenth, I was “doing” an afternoons kiddies party, when one of my tricks went wrong and I burnt the inside of my mouth. I was rushed to A+E, didn’t get seen till 8.00- 8.15 and didn’t get home till 10.15. So I could not carry out the planned snatch.
 

Bloody Oliver Riddles must have done that one, because I did not.
 

Super-O.K just the nine, where are the missing bodies?
 

HE-One’s in the foundations of the Boots Shop in the High Street and the other is under hard standing at the back of James and Son’s Builders Yard.
 

Super-Why did you feel the need to kill trick or treaters?
 

HE-My uncle who lived at 30 Wright Road, was one of the neighbours that chased the yobs off, give them a slapping and then got arrested.
 

That Xmas Eve he’d had a booze down the Pub. On his way back home, a gang of yobs including the two he’d had given a slap to, attacked him and kicked him to death.
 

He didn’t die immediately. I was with him in intensive care when he told me about who his attackers were. Three of the nine killed were in that gang. I’d lined up a fourth and I’d have made him look the part, after I’d killed him.
 

Super-Why didn’t you tell the Police what you knew?
 

HE- Cos you’re fucking useless. Anyway if there is a tenth and it happened last night, Oliver Riddles must have done it.
 

Super-The Sergeant will take your statement sir. Do you wish the Duty Solicitor to be present.
 

HE-No, he can sod off.
 

The Super and the duty solicitor then went into the Interview Room in which the PC and Oliver Riddles were sat.
 

Super-I wasn’t quite honest with you Mr.Riddles there was another kidnapping perhaps murder last night. But you couldn’t have done it nor could Cheerful Charlie. So who do you think did it?
 

HE-I’ve no idea or interest in the answer.
 

Super-Where are the missing two bodies.
 

HE-One is buried in Cheriton Wood and one in some buildings foundation.
 

Super-PC take a full statement from Mr.Riddles and the Duty Solicitor will stay with you.
 

He walked out of the interview room, stood and thought.
 

Super-Shit, nine out of the ten accounted for, but the tenth and latest not. Trick or bloody Treat indeed.

Reviews
Ubu Roi..
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 25th October 2006
I promised to review you, Brian. And I hope this will at least for a while stem your childish comments about being ignored. If you need more, let me know. 
 
Firstly let me thank Phil, Elli, Jane, et al., who it seems regularly slake your voracious appetite for praise. They are kind souls and their selflessness at least spares us all having to put up with even more of your interminable bellyaching that nobody loves you. 
 
Sadly, I am no such virtuous creature. And my first question on reading this would be how long you intend inflicting this serial dross upon the rest of us? Script? My arse! This is not a script. It is at best a draft for a script. And a pretty poor one at that. In sore want of a blue pencil. Were this to be presented to a commercial script editor, you would get the sack! Sans direction; sans directions; sans presentation. It simply drones on in a meandering aimless parody of itself. If you want to learn something about scriptwriting, take a look at Bgheera. He knows how to script and is in my opinion the best on the site. This? Amateurish! Belongs with the excruciating AmDrams. If you are going to try your hand at scriptwiting at least pay the reader the courtesy of trying to do it properly. 
 
Finally, I ought to add that I am aware how much you consider yourself to be above others on this site and how sore you are I and others think you less than worth continuous fullsome accolade. My problem, Brian, is not your mean-spiritedness; nor your snide and malign asides about others-myself included. It is not even your unremarkable writing ability. Rather I find it difficult to comprehend wailing to be taken seriously as an inspiring writer by one who spends so many of his waking hours impersonating a budgerigar. 
 
My compliments to you.

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 26th October 2006
Well here's a review anyway -not from kindness, but from interest. 
 
As you know Brian, I've followed this from the start and enjoyed it. I did think this episode was a bit thin. It seems to race through the events with not enough context or detail. If you read it aloud and picture it as you do you might see what I mean. 
 
Maybe this one is worth reworking. 
 
A comment for both of you: 
While I know it is not my place, role or even wish to request moderation in reviews, I do have an opinion. I think (for what it is worth) that all comments, whether positive or negative should be directed at the work and not the writer. This has not been the case for either of you over the last week or so. Perhaps it's time to stop all this. I am aware that now I've stuck my head over the parapet I might get it knocked off. So be it. 
 
All the best to you both. 
 
Phil.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3445 comments posted) 26th October 2006
 
I had to go back to the last one to remind myself what had happened. You seem to be building up the tension with all the misdirection and having two involved in the killing was a clever move. I do struggle with police stories I couldn’t follow the latest “Prime Suspect” I think it’s all the jargon and police procedure. I think you get the confusion and frustration of the police across well,though 
I did think the confession came a little too easily, usually these types like to “play” with the police; at least they do on TV . I’ve no real life experience to lead me to that conclusion ( honest, guv)  
With regard to the scripting, whenever I’ve tried to put up anything complex it ends up looking a complete mess. It’s the one thing that drives me mad about this site, even the font sizes change and then you waste time re-jigging in-situ and coming up against all the hidden codes, just don’t get me started- too late. Well I’ve started so I’ll finish 
Cheers 
BBS 
Hi Phil
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 26th October 2006
This is not a very good piece of work. I was about to quietly drop it, when Eli posted on part 2 so I posted part 3. 
 
It's one of those I've started so I'll finish moments. 
 
Thanks for your time and attention, but I have never derfaced another writer's thread, though I may posted irritating pieces. 
 
As ever your opinion is valued as is your advice, 
 
Brian
Hi BBS
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 26th October 2006
10 HPs + 5 you know whats. 
 
The trouble is if you reveal the plot to explain what has happened, what do you do for an encore. 
 
This is not a what you see you see is what you get site. I've posted on other sites and not suffered from this problem. 
 
Post in Arial 16 and it seems to know who's the master go down to Font 12 perhaps 14 and it takes command. 
I always sign out and then read as sometimes there seems to be a change between first and second reading, 
 
Brian.

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 27th October 2006
When i saw this posted i got straight on to reading it however i was mildy disapointed. I think you may have run out of steam with this one. Towards the end i lost interest, where the others have had me gripped. I agree with Phil that it was thin on context. Being of a simple mind i was getting confused with the speed it was racing through. Sure with a bit of tweaking you can get it back on track however.
Hi Gill
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 27th October 2006
"I think you may have run out of steam " 
 
Spot on. i should never have written TOT2 or 3 and left it as terse comment on the cruelty of life. 
 
I regretted writing 2 and left it until Eli posted and sparked by her wrote 3 but it was a mistake. 
 
Thanks for your time and honest words. 
 
Brian 
 

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 27th October 2006
hey never say 'never', you'll always learn something. It wasn't that bad.
Gosh aren't you clever
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 27th October 2006
An oblique that! 
 
In the oblique "that" you've achieved more damage than Plastic Paddy's "War and Peace" length diatribe. 
 
At least he thinks it's complete and utter bloody rubbish, a superlative of sorts. 
 
Who will rid me of this unrul piece. 
 

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