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Novella
By francoise
28 October 2006
 Decided to mess around with this, dont know really, not sure about punctuation, and the last haiku seems abit iffy but enjoyed doing this anyway.

As fiction you are
Stuck on a fleeting promise
To be something real.
A paperback ride
I stumble on your sentence
Read between the lines.
To me your words are
Lifted and free from all this
Love I can't release.
So at night I have
The darkness to dissolve you
Into a thick sleep.
But I fold the page
Continue where I left you
And make love again.
And fear the yearning
When I finish reading it
To want more of this.
I can't predict it
The last line of this chapter
The end of this book.
The fact that I am
Stuck on a fleeting promise
To feel something real.

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I warned you , lol
Written by patterjack (1921 comments posted) 27th October 2006
The haiku gets to be addictive . This effort works because the basic image is strong-- but if you do this sort of thing too often and for too long you might finish with a boringly repetetive piece. 
 
I did like this very much because of the strong basis  
 
By the way -- I have seen a version of Dante's Inferno done in limerick form --fine for the first few verses , but then ...... 
 
patterjack

Written by Phil (8698 comments posted) 28th October 2006
This works well for me. Extending the image well. As PJ says, perhaps not to be repeated too often, but this one is great. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by francoise (132 comments posted) 28th October 2006
hankyou for your comments, I think I've become a convert to this form of writing, it works well for me too, since a tight structure keeps me focused on what I want to convey to the reader. I have considered the warning though... it can become abit addictive (like eating one too many hobknobs, gotta take it easy!) 
 
Thanks again 
 
Fran

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