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Trick or Treat 4
By BrianRobertNeal
28 October 2006
I've started so I'll finish.

Trick or Treat-4.
 

PC2-Excuse me sir, is the DS still in the interview room?
 

Super-Who, oh you mean Wizz Kid, the Bramshill Flier.
 

PC2-Yes Sir.
 

Super-What do you want him for.
 

PC2-Elkington couldn’t have done any of them sir, we turned his place over and found an accounts book. For over 20 years he’s done  a Halloween Show at the Kiddies home. He would do two shows, one for the little ones in the afternoon, and one for the older children and staff in the Evening.
 

It’s all in a ring binder.
 

Super-Well done Constable, could you bring it down to Interview Room B.
 

The Super re-entered the Interview Room.
 

Super, “Well Mr.Elkington, have you finished your statement?
 

WK- He’s been very helpful sir.
 

Super- I’m sure he has.
 

PC2 knocked, entered handed the Super the Ring Binder. Then went out.
 

Super-Do you recognise this, Mr Elkington.
 

HE-It’s my accounts.
 

Super-Which proves you could not have committed the Murders.
 

HE-It would have been difficult.
 

Super-Why, have you done all this?


HE-You dragged me out of an engagement, threw me into a Police Van, dragged me handcuffed into this Police Station.
 

Super-How do you and Riddles know each other?
 

HE-We’re brothers, as children we abducted and killed a toddler. In time we were released with new identities.

I was never punished enough. The child’s face haunts me, I’ve tried to blot it out, I’ve tried to make thousands of little faces smile, make lots of happy mums to try to forget the one mum who’ll rarely be happy again.
 

But Oliver, he’s the eldest, he had no sense of guilt. He’d say “we were young, didn’t know what we were doing”.

When mum had her heart attack, Oliver said he was going to kill, one a year till he got caught.
 

I suggested that he would be; as they say on the Telly, “A prime suspect” But not me, Cheerful Charlie Harry Ellington”, look in those accounts and there’s a payment for £5k. So he got himself locked up and I took his money.
 

That’s why I can’t tell you where the two missing bodies are, cos I don’t know. I thought that my getting him locked up had saved many lives, the money, I always give to a “Victims’” Support Group. We’re both nutters, we need locking up.
 

Super-Go on sod off, we’ll make an apology to the media.
 

HE-No lock the pair of us up, Riddles will kill again.
 

Super-Go.
 

WK-One thing Mr.Elkington how did you know there were nine killings.
 

HE-That was easy, there’s a Web-site, it’s patched onto the official ones so I just did a search and as long as I could give a name and place, Riddles would pay up. Mind I had to increase the radius of my search to 60 miles. The rest I got from the local press.
 

Good day gentleman.
 

And he went to collect his belongings and change back into his comic Tramp Outfit. Harry waited till Oliver was released, and they walked off together.
 

HE-We’ve got away with it, they’ve no evidence, they think you’re a raving nutter and I’m a harmless eccentric. Let’s go down the Park were we killed that kid eh.
.
Riddles-“You’re not getting your £5k”
 

They walked silently to the park, people noticed them, you could hardly miss them, one of them being dressed as a comic Tramp.
 

They went back to the exact spot where the toddler was murdered.
 

HE-Now Oliver, you stand were the toddler was, I’ll say like you did, “Can you see the fishes?”. Now you lean forward like he did. Then I’ll jump onto you like this, push you in, and hold you under till you drown. Just like you did to the kid.
 

Harry weighed 16st  and Oliver a mere 9st. It was over in a flash. Still taking no chances he held him face down for a good five minutes.
 

Harry got out of the water, and phoned the Police.
 

HE-I want to admit to killing Oliver Riddles, I’m stood in Stanley Park, by the Boating lake’s Boat House, his bodies in the water.
 

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3445 comments posted) 29th October 2006
The text books say a good ending should be surpising but inevitable, which is always tricky and I think you have pulled it off. As I said I'm not good at following complicated police stories and I had to read it twice. As a small gripe: instead of PC1 PC2 and WK perhaps names and a bit of description just to fasten them in our minds but again it could just be my inability to follow these things. I liked the way you brought it all together at the end with the,obligatory, shock revelation (nice touch) I was wondering where you where going to take this and I think the ending lifted the whole story,something this length raised expectations 
Well done 
BBS
Hi BBS
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 29th October 2006
I started the story and all characters were cyphers, no more than plot devices to provide information. Even Riddles started as,"The MAN" 
 
He get an identitiy and then HE, It was a morality tale in a way because the two men faced with the same atrocity react in different ways.HE tries to make restitution, through his "Scheme" and his work as a Children's entertainer, Riddles has no sense of guilt and would have killed again. 
 
HE makes full restitution. 
 
The only worrying thing is that out there is the killer of the 10 trick or treaters, still at least the police are now aware that there is a serial killer and they have a year to find him. 
 
Tucked in the misinformation in the previous parts are hints to the identity of the actual killer. 
 
But I think I'll leave it here, 
 
Thanks for your time and considered comments. 
 
Brian

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 30th October 2006
Like BBS i find police stories hard to follow, took me ages to work out 'Venus..' and this confused me a little also but i think i got there in the end, my fault not yours. What i quite like about these kinds of stories that you write is the blunt simplicity of them. They are shocking in that they are written not to be shocking, like the events unfold in a normal every day manner. The characters all seem quite 'normal'. Then once you reach the end, and have digested the plot, the experience as a reader really begins. The story keeps on going long after the page has been turned. I am still thinking about it now trying to work out what really happened.  
Good Brian, thanks :)
Hi Gill
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 30th October 2006
Firstly, I've still got to finish "Venus" off. The final part is missing. "Dead endings were posted on crime and long forgotten. 
 
In most of my pieces i want to make the reader think, as BBS has said in the past,I give the reader room and don't overwhelm them with details or facts.  
 
Thanks again for your time and considered thought, 
 
Brian.

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 30th October 2006
A shocking, dramatic, but pretty pleasing ending.  
 
All the best, Phil.

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 30th October 2006
A shocking, dramatic, but pretty pleasing ending.  
 
All the best, Phil.
Hi Phil
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 30th October 2006
"A shocking, dramatic, but pretty pleasing ending." 
 
I wanted the end to match the opening for "punch". 
 
Delighted it made an impact on you, 
 
Brian. 
Hi Brian
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 1st November 2006
I liked the ending to this one, definitely unexpected. Like BBS I found it a little difficult to keep track of the characters running through this on a first read through. The plot fairly zips long through all four of these. In fact, you pack so much plot in that it seems underdeveloped in places- it could maybe have been a much longer piece, but that's just my feeling. Interesting set of pieces and definitely punchy. 
 
Elli

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