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| By umbugjug | ||||||||||||||
| 27 May 2005 | ||||||||||||||
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Another little dark piece i found from a while ago EXT. HIGHWAY By the side of the road, a car stops. A boy gets out and starts to urinate on the grass verge. A man in a in a suit gets out, and lights a cigarette. He is looking at the traffic passing by. Suddenly, a dishevelled girl emerges from the bushes. She runs up to the boy starts to drag him away from the man, saying something. We see the boy say something also. Then he says something to the man. The man flicks down his cigarette and walks towards the two children. The little girl looks scared. TITLES EXT. BURGER KING DRIVE THRU CARPARK A bright sunny day. A 4x4, pulls into the car park. A couple, late thirties gets out, both dressed casually, expensively. The man, who has a mole on his cheek, goes to the back door and opens it. A little girl in a flowery dress gets out. She raises two arms, the man shakes his head, but indulges her, swinging her onto his shoulders. His wife says something, he nods and laughs. The girl raps him on the head playfully. As they walk to the entrance, a middle aged man comes up to them, says something. The father shakes his hand. CLOSE UP The girl is on her dad's arm, listening intently to the conversation. It makes her smile. FATHER (off screen) ... and he said, you've got to go. To be honest, I'd never of given it a chance, with all the bad publicity. 2nd MAN (off screen) Same here bud. Then I thought, what the hey, time's short, and before you know it... boom, the kids are gone, its too late. CUT TO LONG SHOT OF TWO MEN AND GIRL FATHER True. True. Anyhoo, I know it's only a few miles, but we're gonna stop off in Key Biscayne for the night, see the Mangrove swamps and all. We'll be there tomorrow most likely. 2nd MAN (it sounds like a question) See you there then hey, old man. They both laugh, but it is interrupted by a screech of tires, and a thud. CLOSE UP OF GIRL'S FACE She screams. GIRL Daddy, Daddy, that little boy. Help him Daddy, he's hurt. That car, oh Daddy, noooo. CUT TO LONG SHOT OF THE OTHER SIDE OF THE ROAD. In front of a Wendy's drive thru, a car is almost sideways in the road, a body crumpled in front. The man lowers his daughter, and is shielding her from the sight. His wife comes to take over as the man starts to cross the road. On a grass verge below the big W sign, a boy and a girl, dressed as if for church, are watching. They seem shocked, but are not crying. They are just watching. The boy comforts the girl. A man in a business suit comes over. He does not comfort them in any way, just gestures to a black sedan in the car park. They all walk towards it. CLOSE UP OF THE GIRL, FROWNING. EXT. A PARK BENCH BY THE SIDE OF A HIGHWAY The family is sat having a picnic MOTHER (to girl) Are you sure you're okay? GIRL (patiently) Yes mom. But that little boy. He ran into the road on purpose didn't he? MOTHER (Looking worriedly at Father) Oh Beth, no sweetie, he didn't. He just wasn't being careful. You know that we've told you about the highway. Never cross it without your Mom or Dad. BETH (she accepts this, nodding) But.(it's a long drawn out word) What did Daddy mean about bad pubblisea. Is Wonderland a bad place? Is it Daddy? FATHER (laughing gently) No sweetheart, it's the most amazing, wonderful place in the world. Just you wait see. I promise you'll see fantastic things, and you'll meet new friends. Oh, sweetheart, you'll just love it, I know you will. CUT TO She doesn't look so sure. FADE OUT. EXT. A BENCH IN WONDERLAND Our family is eating burgers. Beth seems to be happy. Her parents are very attentive of each other, like young lovers. A man in a suit is walking down the street. He is approaching them. CLOSE UP OF BETH She is looking straight the man, and then at her mum and dad. BETH (firmly) Nonononononononono. CUT TO VIEW OF BENCH The man is nearly there. Beth's father has caught hold of her sweater just as she started to run. He is struggling to keep hold of her. MAN (slick) What's the problem little lady? There's nothing to worry about. We just need to speak to your mom and dad here. (To mum and dad) That boy causing problems earlier has been caught with a DVD player, we believe from your car. He's in our administration suite. All we need you to do is identify the player, and we can press charges. Your help will be much appreciated. As a thank you kindly, we will invite you to our exclusive character meal this evening, complementary of course. CUT OT LONG SHOT Dad is speaking to Beth. She shakes her head. He says something else. She shakes her head. He says something else, and she nods. He opens his arms for her and picks her up. Mum picks up the bags. They start to walk. EXT. A WROUGHT IRON GATE. The suit man is pressing numbers on a keypad. He looks round and smiles. MAN Pretty day, isn't sir? Just like those summers when you were a kid. Seemed to last forever didn't they. I remember a rope-swing over a little creek down by my old grandma's house. Man, those were the days. He opens the gate, just as another suit steps through a door into the alley, about half way. He holds the door open for three children, about Beth's age. Two are looking around mesmerised, the other looks to be upset. They approach. 2nd MAN Hey. Just found these, lost their parents, but they've been located now. One's a bit scared, but he'll be okay. 1st MAN nods and smiles. He looks at mum and dad and winks ‘you know how it is'. Beth is staring at the two happy children. CUT TO INT. A VERY PLUSH WAITING ROOM. A Wonderland sign fills one wall. Beth is sat on her own on a large settee. Her feet are swinging, and don't touch the floor. She stands up and goes over to a window. CUT BETH POV. It is the main street, full of families. We hear Beth sigh. CUT TO INT. ROOM Beth is climbing onto the settee. A door opens to the right and a lady in a suit enters. CUT TO BETH POV LADY Beth, don't do that, there's a good girl. Thank you. Now, is there anything I can get you? Behind the woman we see a corridor, lushly carpeted, with double doors at the end. We lean to one side to see round the lady, and she moves to stop us. We lean the other way, and get a glimpse of four children, all with blonde hair. Two are unhappy, the twins from earlier. The other two look strangely similar to the twins, but themselves are not alike. They are looking at their own hands, each other, the twins, everywhere, in amazement. CLOSE UP OF LADY LADY (patronising) Now Beth. You're a clever girl aren't you. Come on now, sit back down. CUT TO ROOM. Beth is running past the lady, through the door. BETH (shouting) Hey, you there. What's happened? What's going on. What've they done to you? The two twins look sadly at Beth, unable to say anything. One of the other children speaks though. OTHER CHILD It's okay little girl. Sit back down and I'm sure your mom and dad will be out presently. Beth is just staring at her, starts to speak, then stops. The lady is now standing behind her, with a hand gripping her upper arm. OTHER (to Beth) Come on, don't look so worried, everything is just fine, just fine. One of the twins comes over to Beth, and taps her on the shoulder. Looking glazed, he gestures over to a door. CUT TO DOOR PLATE. It says ‘Lab 1.3 : Gestational Symbiosis' CUT TO BETH She shrugs off the lady's grip and bolts for the door. Just before the lady can catch her, she bursts through. CUT TO CLOSE UP OF BETH'S FACE. The room is full of blinding white light, Beth's arm is shielding her eyes. She lowers it slowly, and a look of alarm spreads across her face. We can see her breath. CUT TO BETH POV There are numerous boxes along one wall. They look like Turkish baths. They have small windows on them. PAN RIGHT. ZOOM IN ON ONE ABOUT HALF WAY DOWN THE ROOM. There is a nameplate, ‘Nathan Crane, Jennifer Crane (Brad and Joe)'. CUT TO BETH The lady and children in the doorway will not enter the room. Beth is reading the nameplate. She peers into the box. LADY (worriedly) Come out of there immediately, you cannot be in the symbiosis chamber at this stage. It could be very dangerous. Beth looks at her in contempt. CUT TO BETH POV Through the window we see turquoise jelly, but inside the jelly we see a person. As we look we can make out a face rising towards us. It is a teenage boy. He is struggling to breath - he looks like he is dying. CUT TO BETH She is running up and down looking at the nameplates. We can also see the lady gesturing to someone. Beth gets to the end box. She stops and looks at the window. Two figures in silver suits run into the room, shutting the door behind them. They run up to Beth and one carries her out. She does not struggle. The other figure looks at the box. CUT TO FIGURE POV. The nameplate says ‘Jon Lusher, Julie Lusher (Beth Lusher)'. PAN SLOWLY UP TO WINDOW IN BOX Inside we see nothing but turquoise. ZOOM IN TO WINDOW AND FADE INT. ANOTHER WAITING ROOM, SIMILAR TO PREVIOUS Beth is sat very still on a settee. Her feet still don't touch the ground. A man is standing before her talking. CLOSE UP BETH'S FACE She is looking at the man, sadness in her eyes, but also bitterness. MAN (off screen, continuing his lecture) ...the symbiosis room just cannot be entered at that stage. BETH You should've locked the door. MAN
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