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| By Fledermaus | ||||||||||||
| 31 October 2006 | ||||||||||||
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A first attempt at writing comedy... We see a dimly lit room. The furniture is rather worn off and on the walls there are posters of horror movies. Through a window we can see flashes of lightning against a dark sky. Two young women wearing pyjamas are sitting on the couch, staring at the television screen which casts a blue glow into the room. Gloomy music plays (apparantly coming from the television) and for a few moments we just see the two girls watching and getting ever more scared. Then there's a slow and heavy knock on the door. The women look at eachother, and one (Mona) reluctantly gets up and walks to the door. As she opens it a dark figure enters. Her face is hidden in the shadow of her hood and she doesn't say a word. The woman who let her in staggers back. Then the figure takes off her coat and she seems to be a blonde girl wearing pink clothes and with a cheerful smile upon her face (Ellis). She's holding a box in one of her hands. Ellis: Happy Haloween. I brought chocolate. Mona: Thanks. Just drop your coat uh... somewhere. Ellis drops her coat on the floor and she and Mona walk to the couch. She sits down between the Mona and the other girl (Jane). For a moment they are staring at the screen, then Jane screams and covers her eyes with her hands. Mona's eyes and mouth open wide and she shrugs back. Ellis is isn't impressed. Ellis: What a mess. That zombie sure needs to practice his incisions. They keep on watching. After a few seconds the scene is repeated. Ellis: That's not where the aorta is located. He only pierced his windpipe. He should be alive for at least five more minutes. The other girls just look at Ellis and they go on watching until the scene is repeated once again Ellis: Well, that's some way to separate the brain's hemispheres. Not very subtle, but if he wasn't dead, he'd make a nice test subject. They continue watching and Mona and Jane are again frightened by one of the scenes. Ellis frowns. Ellis: Ouch. That skelleton was suffering from a hernia in the intervertebral disc. That must hurt. Then a more cheerful tune starts playing, and Mona and Jane are obviously relieved. The camera turns and we see how the main characters of the horror movie are lying in a bed and kissing eachother. Ellis: What are they doing? This is disgusting! They just met eachother and he isn't even wearing protection. Horrible!
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