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By tartqueen
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31 October 2006 |
I was thinking about being afraid and how it holds us all back and this poem was the result. Apologies for the shortness but i don't really write long poems. Fear is like a prison,
It chains us all.
The tide of life is lapping at your feet.
Dive in. |
if only
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3559 comments posted) 31st October 2006 | If ony other poets shared your view. This deserves a mention if only for it's wonderful brevity. ( and I like the sentiments too)
They do say Brevity is the soul of wit.
cheers
BBS | Make sure...
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 31st October 2006 | You know how deep it is first!
Oli |
Written by ellipinnock (1784 comments posted) 31st October 2006 | Interesting idea, I really like the way it looks on the page. I enjoyed the last two lines more than the first. I felt the beginning trod a little too close to cliche for such a short piece where all the words really need to be doing twice as much work as normal. Just my opinion but I think you could probably make the first half stronger.
Elli |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 31st October 2006 | It seems like I'm following Elli around tonight and we seem to be on the same wavelength. Still, it is interesting.
All the best,
Phil. |
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