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New Windows
By Talisker
02 November 2006
The numbnuts I have next door (Star reading, racist, philistine, moron) has got new windows!  Isn't he a lucky boy! Open, shut, open, shut.  Oh, linoleum!  Have you seen what the Rodgers have got???  Must've had a win on the bingo!

Oli

I don’t envy you your new windows!
So why strut by like a circus stilt-walker?
They can’t change your outlook anyhow,
The cracks and chips are on your perception.
 

Your attitudes are hermetically sealed,
Try the feather test, it doesn’t deviate,
Just floats to the base of your vacuous skull,
Caught in the doldrums of your mind.
 

I don’t want to look in your new windows,
There is nothing I would want to see,
Not your frumpy wife, your changing rooms décor,
Nor the grinning jackanapes you call sons.
 

You are a numpty my friend, a numpty.
New windows cannot change the fact.
When I speak it is your eyes which reflect,
Triple glazed ignorance back at me.
 

The eyes they say are windows on the soul,
No guiding lantern hanging in yours,
Just the blankness of a black curtain.
Emphasizing a huge streak of bird shit.
 

Oli (02/11/06)

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 2nd November 2006
OK ; but on the plus side if they are new then they are double-glazed which should at least cut down on the noise; at least you can't hear them. I get the feeling you're a glass half empty man 
And though poem may be cathartic a baseball bat is more affective. 
cheers 
BBS

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 2nd November 2006
I don't know if I was supposed to, but the last line made me laugh. 
 
PMed. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil. 
 

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