Great Writing - Home > Extended > The Polish Connection - Chapter 38
READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 3170 guests online and 7 members online
Extended Work
The Polish Connection - Chapter 38
By jean.day
04 November 2006
January, 1919

“Dear Barbara, Rebecca and my little Beth,

The war might be over, but we are not yet free. In fact, some of our most difficult days have been those that came after the armistice. The war was over. We all felt sure that the longed-for day of release was at last arriving. Almost all work in camp came to an end and it is difficult to persuade men that it is worthwhile to undertake any operation except that of packing their belongings. Men who have borne up against previous troubles are beginning to give way under this final strain. There was also a new journalistic agitation against allowing any enemy alien to remain in England, and this raised fresh anxieties among those whose families and ties bound them close to England.

At length some movement has begun. Small parties left for repatriation to Germany; there are no ships  available to take large numbers. A new committee has been set up, to investigate the cases of those who wish to remain in England. Our friends all left until only the industrial adviser was here, living now in official quarters in camp, and largely occupied in closing and clearing the workshops.

We have heard that about three thousand of the interned civilians will be allowed to remain in England but must go first to other camps, until they will be released in batches, and enabled at last to rejoin their families and see with their own eyes what havoc the war has made in their homes. I am hopeful that I will be out of here and back to your home again within a month or so.

One of my fellow internees, Johann Sauer, has just told me that he will be sent back to Germany, to Weisslensburg where he was born when we leave. His request to remain in Britain was denied. He was in tears. He has an English wife and 6 English born children. I suppose the tribunals who make these decisions are looking for retribution for all the English dead as a result of the war, but poor Johann had no more to do with it than I did. He also has been here since 1915.

Love
Peter”

John went back to his University job almost immediately after Christmas and is very involved in his work again. The girls have gone back to school, as the worst of the flu seems to be over. They think the cold weather has had a beneficial effect.

Here is the newspaper story about our favourite American at the moment.

Friday December 27, 1918
Guardian Unlimited

During his wonderful progress this afternoon from Charing Cross Station to Buckingham Palace, President Wilson did not see much of London. The expressive countenance of our streets was hidden under a brilliant mask of flags. There has not been such a show of colour or such genuine lightheartedness in the crowd since Coronation days in the world before the war.

All the gaiety pent up through the cruel four and a half years seemed to be released in the great noise of cheering that rose round the leader of the world’s peace. Londoners flocked by the tens of thousands into the narrow two miles of street to see him.

Twenty thousand soldiers with bayonets bright in the December sunshine lined the route, guards in war khaki rode before the carriage. But this was not a military show. The plain citizen raising a tall hat in response to the cheers was the centre of all. When the cavalry escort came jingling out of the sanded courtyard at Charing Cross, preceding the carriage in which the President and King George sat side by side, a roar of cheers went up. It gathered volume all the way round the West End to the Palace.

The Charing Cross crowd took to President Wilson at first sight. This President Wilson who sat very erect beside the King was a man with a powerful head and a full, fresh-coloured face - a face irradiated by the famous smile. The smile positively shone. The President was clearly genuinely pleased and moved by the good fellowship and hero worship of the crowd. He raised his silk hat - women remarked that it was brand new - and waved it with a generous gesture. The bells rang out joyously, ringing a sharp note with the long soft murmur of cheers.

In the clear sky at this moment there appeared a flight of aeroplanes in arrowhead formation; it seemed to follow the procession as an aerial escort. The shine from the big red sun caught the planes and turned them into silver. A band played the President along into the wide pool of humanity collected in Trafalgar Square. As the carriages went by the pavement had appreciative eyes for the President’s wife, who sat in a carriage with our Queen and Princess Mary. Mrs Wilson appeared to be thoroughly alive to every detail of the scene; her black eyes sparkled.

The President received the salutation of Queen Alexandra, who came out on the pavement in front of Marlborough House with the Queen of Norway and little Prince Olaf. The crowd, unbidden, fell back and left a clear space for the Queen Mother and her party. When the carriage was passing, the King drew the President’s attention to his mother, and he rose, waved his hat, and bowed. Queen Alexandra responded by waving a little Stars and Stripes flag. Mrs Wilson waved her bouquet of orchids in greeting to Queen Alexandra.

America provided the strongest flavour in Constitution Hill near the Palace. Here were soldiers in khaki who proclaimed themselves on a board as “Americans in British uniforms”, also a cheerful group of sailors with a ragtime band. All down the road innumerable little flags fluttered in men’s caps. Queer American yells drowned stolid British cheers. An American airman appeared overhead and did various stunts. He threw himself about in the sky like an urchin turning Catherine wheels.

British Bluejackets were on guard at the Palace gates. The wide space round the Victoria Memorial was jammed. There was an Australian soldier perched on the head of one of the calm white statues - he was envied by thousands. Australian and every other kind of soldier started the rhythmic shout “We want Wilson” the moment the party had gone inside. A scarlet cloth was spread over the balcony, and everyone knew the President would appear. Soon after three he gratified the multitude by coming out, with his wife and the King and Queen.

He stood there tall, imposing, bareheaded. Queen Mary handed him a Union Jack, which he waved. His smile gleamed in the dusk. He addressed a few words expressing his gratitude and pleasure, but they were heard by very few. He disappeared. Darkness fell on the frozen park, and the crowd poured way down the Mall past the captured German guns.

Reviews

Written by Clifftown (620 comments posted) 4th November 2006
Excellent writing as usual. I especially liked the contrast between Johann's sadness at not being allowed to go back to England, and the joyous celebrations. It just goes to show, there were different consequences for every individual. 
 
I'm glad you enjoyed the creative writing class, I know what you mean about proper constructive advice - it's so valuable. I will be interested to read the revised 'Rosie and Anna' if you decide to post it. I'll need a decent morning read after 'The Polish Connection' has finished!
Hi Jean!
Written by LynB (435 comments posted) 4th November 2006
I think Clifftown has said it all about this chapter - every conceivable emotion, so accurately portrayed. Beautiful writing, as usual. I, too, will miss this once it's finished. I've enjoyed every chapter. 
 
I've been toying with the idea of a creative writing class, as I think it would be useful. It seems to have helped you with you writing - maybe I could get some useful tips, as well. 
 
Thank you for reviewing my last chapter. I always value your comments! :)
Thanks Clifftown and Lyn
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 4th November 2006
Johann was a real person. I found information about him on a website where relatives of the interned people are trying to contact each other to share information. His granddaughter said that they never saw him again. I don't know if they were unable or unwilling to join him in Germany or what.  
 
There are two distinct types of creative writing class. I belong to both kinds. In one, you get support from the readers and everybody is very kind and only says nice and positive things about your work. I made a mistake in that kind of class for making what I thought was a fairly minor criticism, and the woman left the group.  
 
I think the kind that is hard and critical is the more useful kind - but also you need to be pretty thick skinned. And you have to feel that the people who are reviewing you are at least as good at writing as you are, if not better, or else you don't value their criticism the same way. In my University group, I think out of the 12, probably 8 are much better writers than I am. But I am much more prolific than they, and also practical, as none of them has anything in print except the teacher. My being in print might have been self-published but it does put a closure around my writing which I like.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 7th November 2006
I find it difficult to objectively criticise your work as I get so invovled when I read it. I get so carried along with the narrative and the characters that the end comes as a shock and I haven't had time to "put my critical hat on" 
So I apologise if I have been unconstructive but I have enjoyed them. The writing is so clear, unfussy and emotionally charged 
cheers 
BBS
Thanks BBS
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Your kind words came at just the right time. I had just had a enormously long email from a relative slating me for Day after Day - it apparently is full of mistakes not only in spelling, grammar, syntax, font but also the history is very boring and gets in the way of the story. And he had a free copy.  
 
So your kindly uncritical review made up for it. Tomorrow I am posting the big chapter in the Polish Connection - so I am hoping it will pass the great writing test.
It's All Relative
Written by YaakovaShoshana (24 comments posted) 11th August 2007
The criticism from your relative highlights the very reason that none of my family even knows I write! I've shared my creative endeavor with a few friends, but I wouldn't dream of telling my family. To get Biblical, "A prophet is not without honor save in his own country and in his own house." That's true for artists, too!
Thanks Jackie
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 12th August 2007
I must add that I have had tremendous support from other relatives for my writing. And since I do add actual real stories about relatives in some of my work, I can understand when they are sensitive about it. My book called Anna and Rosie is a case in point. It is about my mother and her sister - and I use real letters that my mother wrote to her sister, which, after they both died, were sent to me. When I finished the book, I sent a copy to Rosie's daughter - who loved the book but told me that I would do irreperable damage in the family if I were to publish it. So I have compromised. I went through the book and eliminated anything that anyone could possibly be offended by - but the story loses as a result.
You're Welcome, Jean
Written by YaakovaShoshana (24 comments posted) 12th August 2007
That's similar to what I've done in my story. A lot of the details are real, but the story is complete fiction. 
 
Remember those photomosaics that were popular about a decade ago? Hundreds of small pictures were put together in such a way as to make one large and totally unrelated image. That's what I've done in my story, used a technique I think they call modeling. 
 
A lot of my characters are combinations of the traits and characteristics of several people, so no one can point to any one particular character and say that I singled them out for ridicule. 
 
I've taken some isolated incidents that happened to me, and people I know along with some utter fabrications, and put the whole mess together in a totally different context to create something that bears no resemblance to reality. 
 
You gotta love plausible denyability!

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item