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Perfection
By rilLie
05 November 2006
somehow, the coming inevitable end of sembreak bothers me... so does my ate farting behind me.... well.... yeah.. enjoy, anyway.

I want every corner, every nook spotless

I want every inch of this place cleaned senseless,

I want every cranny mopped in thorough

I want it be done, today, not tomorrow!


I want it to be perfect, I want it to be nice.

I want every space clean, catch all those mice!

I want my face shaved, keep away that stubble!

Failure, yet again, is simply unnacceptable!


My heart might as well stop, if failure I commit,

I'd rather jump from a cliff, if that all but meant it.

I'd use maybe Ketalid or Marijuana to escape

God, I don't want to mess up this V.I.P. date!!!

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OK Rillie!
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 6th November 2006
I thought you were a girlie, stubble? You're not one of those lady-boys are you??? 
 
VIP date? Over-zealous housework. Someone eating farts(?) My poor alcohol deprived brain is strugglin without explanation. C'mon, out with it! What is going on in Rillieland??? 
 
Oli 
 

Written by rilLie (328 comments posted) 7th November 2006
i am a girlie and im sure your poor alcohol-deprived brain is working.. i hope. :grin Where did you get "someone eating farts (?)"...  
 
ohkey.. honestly, I got inspired by this fanfic. i read a lot of fanfics and this one's one of my faves... I just thought about the anxiety a man must feel before meeting a girl. There was once this guy who asked me out... and I noticed that his hands were sweating... and I just wrote this down. 
 
can't stop my muse, can I? 
 
the fanfic is here: http://www.fictionalley.org/authors/hrhbunbury/MDNAD01a.html 
 
and for the last tym.. I'm a girl.
Ok OK OK Calm down!
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Your're a lovely girl, and much the better for that. But In the intro to this it still says something about eating farts, honest! 
 
Oli :grin

Written by rilLie (328 comments posted) 7th November 2006
oh.. u meant "ate".. sorry... "ate" actually means "big sister" in Tagalog... I forgot to define! 
haha 
 
it sounds funny, if it was in english! :eek  
 
"my ate farting" 
 
trust me, i'm laughing my arse off.... 
 
:grin  
 
-rilLie

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