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Poetry
Me & Them
By B.D.
07 November 2006
I think I lost something along the way -

a piece of me, a piece of them.

It seems I'll never say all I have to say,

for the peace of me because of them.

And it's like its always tomorrow without today,

expecting me to wait and them to stay.

It's like I got to a destination without choosing the way...

now I'm stuck waiting for an unknown, waiting like them.


I'm sure I lost something along the way:

a piece of me and a piece of them.

It seems I never say all I have to say

because I like to keep the peace between me and them.

And its always tomorrow, no today...

I don't want to wait but expect them to stay.

I got to this destination by a mysterious way...

I'm still spinning around, waiting, unlike them.

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Interesting
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 7th November 2006
I liked some of the ideas in this piece very much. Some of it reads a little awkwardly and I'm not sure I understood everything you were driving at but maybe I'm being dense. Good effort. 
 
Elli 
Go on!
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Give yourself a capital letter. You can't be that insignificant ;)  
 
I was thinking "lost something along the way" was a song lyric, but it may just be a cliche. In fact this looks like a song to me. 
 
Like darling EP, I found the meaning a bit obscure.  
 
Oli 
 

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Yep, sounded like lyrics to me. Not sure if I garnered all I was supposed to. It might help a little, as Oli has hinted, if there were capitals and regular punctuation. 
 
Phil.
thanks
Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 11th November 2006
I wrote it in a hurry & posted it the same...

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