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The Boy Who Hated School
By shakermaker
07 November 2006
Don't know if this belongs in Poetry or For Kids, so I put it in both.
Quite rushed(mental note: Take more time), but I'm reasonably happy with it.

School; a sickly, twisted time
I never want to learn or try
My friends are in the class above
Doing things that I would love

Rules; They never seem to cease
Set to give the teacher peace
Pieces of them suit me fine
Others I just can't abide

Teachers;Seem to have a smell
That I associate with hell
Instead of being sweet and fresh
It's cigarettes and coffee breath

Preachers; like old Father Best
We listen hard, as he's our guest
And from the church he strolls each week
To talk of god and all things bleak

Detention; what's the point in that?
I miss my lunch and daily chat
With Auntie Pam and best mate Joe
I'm at the wall, stuck on skid row

Attention; the headmaster hollers
"Come with me!" I know what follows
A telling off, and letter home
His mouth, it gently starts to foam

Prison cell; headmasters office
"I didn't do it, sir I promise."
But adults seem to have a way
Of pulling out the truth each day

Final bell; can't come too soon
Now I'll break the sad, sad news
That's bound to make my parents sigh
"You stupid boy! Oh why? Oh why?"


Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3559 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Rushed or not it made me smile. I think it bridges the gap nicely between kids and adults; both I think would enjoy this. I know I certainly did. 
I liked the rhymes. I especially liked the way you used them to highten the comedy. 
Great fun 
Cheers 
BBS

Written by shakermaker (48 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Oh thanks very much! That's a really positive comment! Glad you enjoyed it! When you said the rhymes did you notice the rhyming of the first words? ie. detention/attention?

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3559 comments posted) 8th November 2006
I'm afraid not; that was a bit too clever for me but I'm sure the kids would spot it. I'm not a poet and read it as a narrative piece as I do most poetry so I'm just out to be entertained which is why this worked for me 
BBS

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