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Vegetable Dreams
By Witzl
07 November 2006

VEGETABLE DREAMS

 

Sweet corn, snugly wrapped

kernels tight, precise

silk of fine, pale green

whispering in the wind

 

Plump tomatoes, trembling

waiting for the knife

drunk on summer sun,

questing bumble bees

 

Courgette, green-and-cream

bulging on the vine

quick, a twist, a snap –

—wrest from leafy nest

 

Rhubarb’s rose-tinged nubs

poked through frozen crusts

Now triumphant limbs

clad in emerald robes

 

Sweet snaps, crisp and taut

pushed from frothy white

petals, wafting scent

tendrils, thin and coiled

 

Pumpkins, golden globes

Tangled deep inside

moist and thick-walled womb

glistening, wedge-shaped jewels

 

 

Reviews
SWEET DREAMS WITZL
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Goodness me! I would have had to have thought for a week to have got so much out of the vegetables that you have. What a wonderful description. You are competing with DH Lawrence (see his: Flowers of Tuscany). Really good writing Witzl. I loved it.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 7th November 2006
Nice clean imagery, it had quite a nostalgic feel to it for me. To me, the second verse felt like it was missing a word somewhere...but no matter, I thoroughly enjoyed this. 
 
Elli
A vegetarian litany
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 7th November 2006
A sensuous exploration of the vegetable garden. As an organic gardener, I enjoyed it.  
 
What about exposing your melons though? :grin  
 
Oli

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 8th November 2006
I didn't grow melons this year, so have none to expose. But you ought to see my pumpkins! (Don't know how to use emoticons and don't plan on learning how, but picture one right here with gormless smiling face: ______). 
 
Thank you for reading thisand commenting, everyone. No more vegetables to watch growing for five long months. Unless my daikon radishes shock me and manage to survive. 
Not quite Marvell - ous , but
Written by patterjack (1328 comments posted) 8th November 2006
I am reminded of coy mistresses : 
 
My vegetable love should grow 
Vaster than empires, and more slow. 
 
Took a lot of fertiliser though ( of the bovine kind ) 
 
Brian 

Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 12th November 2006
I liked this, particularly the last verse.. which had the makings of a potential haiku if restructured. 
 
Fran

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