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By pure_heartofmine
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08 November 2006 |
more thoughts... tell me what you think. Thanks!
~Jillian maybe someday i will be able to smile without questioning my happiness. maybe one day i'll be able to cry not because im alone but because i can;t stop laughing. maybe one day when the world begins again i wont be afraid of it stopping. maybe one day i wont want to sleep not because of work but because i dont want to miss one minute of what i have. and maybe one day i will fall in love to where each and everyday is an adventure i don't want to miss. and death wont be a tragic thing because it will mark the fact that i lived. that i loved. that i survived. one day i will make these maybes a reality, because i want to live. |
Human Condition
Written by eloquentdukewilson (38 comments posted) 7th November 2006 | Maybe this, maybe that - unavoidable, in our blood like salt. Maybe you will, maybe you won't - just don't make it a priority to smile without questioning your happiness, crying because you're laughing too hard, etc. - many people never reach that status in life - and the fact remains: they lived and survived.
Thanks for the read. |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 8th November 2006 | Sorry if my last review was less than constructive.
I've had a think. Perhaps this and the previous post could be reworked into poetry. If you did, they would need a far stronger structure than you have at the moment.
Maybe I'm old fashioned, maybe it's irrelevant, but I found not capitalising 'i' distracting.
Hope this is of more use. (Of course, I could be completely wrong!)
Phil. |
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