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By Talisker
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08 November 2006 |
My Father's Father. But I was there, as a young adult, to witness the sad theatre. “I am a done man, John”, his dying speech, Whisper-croaked, and then the man was gone, No unplumbed thought, no life’s secret to teach, Nor consolation for a grieving son.
His bluish shell remained to mock the day, I watched, but never saw his soul take flight, I’m certain that it went beneath the clay,
The aggregate of father died that night.
Oli 08/11/06
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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 8th November 2006 | Very touching and all the better for being short I think. I particularly like the second stanza; too personal to comment more deeply. Elli | Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 8th November 2006 | very personal, I must say. excellent, still.. very touching. -rilLie | Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 8th November 2006 | Hard to comment on pieces such as this, but I'll try. I thought it very complete. No wasted words - all full of meaning - or even signifying the lack of it. It was touching, but also cold. (Not in the heartless bastard way) Just read my review - I hope it makes sense! Liked it very much. All the best, Phil. |
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