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A Father's Death
By Talisker
08 November 2006
My Father's Father.  But I was there, as a young adult, to witness the sad theatre.

“I am a done man, John”, his dying speech,
Whisper-croaked, and then the man was gone,
No unplumbed thought, no life’s secret to teach,
Nor consolation for a grieving son.

His bluish shell remained to mock the day,
I watched, but never saw his soul take flight,
I’m certain that it went beneath the clay,
The aggregate of father died that night.

Oli 08/11/06

Reviews

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 8th November 2006
Very touching and all the better for being short I think. I particularly like the second stanza; too personal to comment more deeply. 
 
Elli

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 8th November 2006
very personal, I must say. excellent, still.. very touching. 
 
-rilLie

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 8th November 2006
Hard to comment on pieces such as this, but I'll try. I thought it very complete. No wasted words - all full of meaning - or even signifying the lack of it. 
 
It was touching, but also cold. (Not in the heartless bastard way) Just read my review - I hope it makes sense! 
 
Liked it very much. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

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