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Darkness
By Oops
08 November 2006
I was bored........

It crept across the wall, just a shadow in the corner of her eye.  The storm raged outside making a howling sound that reverberated throughout the house.  Wrapping her duvet tightly around her, covering her face but leaving a gap to peep through she pushed her body further into the bed.  "Can't see me, can't see me" echoed through her head. It moved closer, she could feel its presence.  It glided across the ceiling coming close to her bed, her heart beat so fast she thought it was guna pop right out of her chest.  Her limbs ached from keeping them still but she dared not move in case she was spotted.  Suddenly she couldn't see it anymore, where was it? Had it gone under the bed? Fear gripped her and she nearly passed out, just as quick as it had disappeared it reappeared again dragging the security of her duvet off her.  A small whimper escaped her lips as its weight bared down on upon her.  "Keep your eyes shut, keep your eyes shut" she told herself as the shadow clawed at her.  She tried to think of anything to block out the pain from its talons, she thought of the picture she had made for her mum at school that day, thinking of her mum she could hear the dull snoring sound emanating from her bedroom, she called out to her but the shadow took her voice.  She couldn't scream or yell, the shadow flowed up her body and she could feel it on her face, the evilness burnt her face.  "This is it" she thought.  As she prepared herself for the worst the weight lifted, the shadow stayed there for a second or two then went, gliding back across the wall to the door it came from, before leaving completely it turned and said "don't tell your mum, it's our little secret".

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Wow!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 8th November 2006
A late Halloween effort - scary. Is this about real "abuse" or the strength of imagination?  
 
Only one nit pick - "guna"??? 
 
Nice distilled terror. 
 
Oli :)

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 8th November 2006
Mmmmm scary stuff! Shrt but definitely not sweet! great :) 
 
Elli

Written by peeano1 (86 comments posted) 8th November 2006
Very mysterious, not scary by reading it but scary by the thought. It was pretty short...I would have liked to read more but you typed a nice piece of work. 
Uubersome cooler! :)

Written by Phil (6738 comments posted) 12th November 2006
I read this as being about abuse, not just a scary story. Effective piece as it tells of the fear and silence. 
 
Phil.

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