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Poetry
Unawares
Written by PaulaBrown
06 March 2005
yes, men are wicked flirts too!

He says that his hands are cold,
oblivious to the physical effect
on his companion; the
mind-rush chest-flush
goose-bumpy heart-thumpy
thrill resulting in a shudder.

His eyes meet hers fractionally
longer than they did before
as he relaxes into familiarity
and she feels her pupils swell,
burst and blossom, wide eyes
averted, lest they give her away.

His mouth shapes ordinary words,
his lips part gently and then touch.
She speaks of something ugly, a
diversion as he places his hand on
his stomach and his dark hair
waves at her, laughing.

Reviews

Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 3rd April 2005
I'm not too sure about the theme of this. It seems to start out as one thing and then change course in the last verse into something darker. 
I like the way it's written, the first verse really fizzes and makes me catch my breath and there is a god sense of anticipation in the secod verse. 
 
I'm having tourble with the last line 
 
< his dark hair waves at her> not sure what you mean by that. 
 
spidey

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