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Chloe

By Talisker

09 November 2006

As promised - for no1butClo

With my kindest regards

Chloe’s lips are like the petals,
Of a dew kissed, blood-red rose,
Though her kisses sting like nettles,
Let me go where Chloe goes.

Chloe’s cheeks are pale and perfect,
Like the drifting winter snows
By her button nose dissected,
Let me go where Chloe goes.

Chloe’s face is like an angel,
O’er her head a halo glows,
See her eyes like diamonds spangle,
Let me go where Chloe goes.

Chloe’s blooming like a goddess,
Will she love me? heaven knows,
Grant my prayer, it is but modest,
Let me go where Chloe goes.

Chloe means a blooming flower,
But no flower such beauty shows,
Every day and every hour,
Let me go where Chloe goes.

Oli (09/11/06)

Reviews

Written by ellipinnock (1784 comments posted) 9th November 2006

Watch it you! I might start getting jealous if you transfer your affections to other girls!

Nice poem though

Elli :grin

=P
Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 9th November 2006

I hate to tell you that the translation of my name is literally "little green shoot" - not nearly so poetic, but thankyou! :grin

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 9th November 2006

Liked this Oli. Out of interest, why 'kisses sting like nettles?'

All the best,

Phil.

Phil
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 9th November 2006

Because it (kind of) rhymes with "petal" hehehehe

Also, I think it suggests "forbidden love".

Oli

Written by rilLie (328 comments posted) 10th November 2006

haha.. great poem!

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 10th November 2006

For a minute there, I thought that Chloe might be snacking on the kind of salsa I like to make: 90-proof jalapeno. Then even her handshake would sting like nettles.

I'd ask for a poem too, Oli, but fear humiliating comparisons to wiener schnitzl.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 10th November 2006

I forgot to say that, all joking aside, this is a really clever, lovely poem.

Revision note:
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 10th November 2006

Line 2 changed from

"Like a perfect blood-red rose"

to

"Like a dew kissed blood red rose"

I didn't like the repetiaion of the word perfect in stanza 1 and 2.

Oli

Written by morley (4 comments posted) 11th November 2006

elegent (sp?) and oh so true!

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