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Products of Their Time
By Witzl
10 November 2006

PRODUCTS OF THEIR TIME

We have here, eloquent in black and white

and penned in flowing cursive, graceful lines

describing fine possessions, worldly goods.

But what are these here nestled in among

fine feather pillows, mattresses and pots?

These legal gifts, these products of their time

Not wagons, no, nor oxen nor their gear

Nor horses, bridles, saddles or the like

Here is a girl named Abby, aged thirteen

A woman called Mahalia and her man

their progeny to come herewith bequeathed

to have and hold forever, signed and sworn

(entire possession, use and profit too)

But understand these papers duly stamped

were not the leavings of some evil mind

but those in fact of decent, kindly men

who loved their wives and children tenderly –

and were, we say, the products of their time.

Reviews
Legalities
Written by patterjack (1430 comments posted) 9th November 2006
... can cover a multitude of sins -- some of omission , some of commission , some from mere ignorance. 
 
This is a remarkable recapturing of a past style , almost Augustan in its restraint . Like the Augustans , it is neat , clear and precise but with a strong underlying emotional impact beneath the semi-judicial style . Lawyer language with a bite ! 
 
The understated content condemns those decent kindly men far more than polemics would. 
 
I am happy to have been exposed to your range of expressive abilities , Witzl , --- with an underlying envy ! 
 
patterjack

Written by ellipinnock (1784 comments posted) 10th November 2006
Wow. I think I'll have to come back this, it's all the more powerful for being seemingly understated. Really great. 
 
Elli
Very Powerful
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 10th November 2006
Like Brian, I envy your range too Witzl.  
 
This came as a bit of a shock. A totally different approach to an old subject. Just wonderful. 
 
You seem to be able to switch from the very trivial light things in life, to the mega-issues with ease. I think I will write a poem about you after all. 
 
Oli :)
I didn't get it ...
Written by johniebg (553 comments posted) 10th November 2006
... not at all? Tripped off the tongue quite nicely though.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 10th November 2006
Johnie, I didn't put in an introduction precisely because I wanted to know whether people would get this right away -- or not. Brian, Elli and Oli all got it (I believe), so it may have something to do with age.  
 
As you know, slavery was practiced in America for well over two hundred years. Slaves were passed down through families in perfectly legal wills -- not just the individual slaves themselves, but all their 'progeny' to come. I know this because I have been doing my family's genealogy, and I have copies of the wills in my possession.  
 
Good, ostensibly Christian, law-abiding men and women treated other people like products -- all because slavery was not recognized as a gross violation of others' rights.

Written by ellipinnock (1784 comments posted) 10th November 2006
Yep, got the point, thought it was subtly obvious without being too much in your face actually. I reckon you were right not to put in an introduction. 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 10th November 2006
Does beig a product of 'your time' forgive the wrongs? Does it make them ignorant and so innocent? Just a thought, not a condemnation. Who knows what we accept as acceptable now will be condemned by history? 
 
To many questions - sorry. 
 
Enjoyed. As others have mentioned, the understated nature makes this work well. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 10th November 2006
I really am glad you both got the point! 
 
Phil, I wish I could answer that question. The more I think about it, the more that phrase 'a product of their time' seems like another way of describing someone with little vision. The wills I have been looking at that include feather beds, copper pots, etc. with 'one Negro woman, one girl slave, aged about 12,' are wills from my own ancestors. They were respectable people, by all accounts, but it is mind-boggling to think that they could not see beyond their own convenience and comfort.  
 
Now I am looking at my own life and wondering how my own descendants may judge me. 
 
Thank you both for reading the poem and commenting on it.

Written by ellipinnock (1784 comments posted) 5th December 2006
I was reminded about this piece and came back for another look. I like it even better this time around, one of your best. 
 
Elli

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