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By shakermaker
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11 November 2006 |
Just a simple man
Erected by the masses
Suffused with phony light
Used by all the classes
Superstition falls
Choices are an option
Hold your tongue or speak
Rejoice or take no action
In the midst of life
Some are dying fast
Tell me how he lives, when others simply pass
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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 10th November 2006 | Choices are an option???? Don't know if I missed the point with that bit but it just made thing, 'yeh, well they're choices aren't they? and it rhymes with action...'
I liked the ideas in the rest of it although I would have liked it to be a bit longer with maybe a few more hints and clues...I'm not sure I understood everything you wanted to say. Interesting.
Elli
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Written by shakermaker (48 comments posted) 10th November 2006 | | To have choice is now an option...Whereas long ago choice was not an option..This poem is deeper than the surface, but the clues are there. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 10th November 2006 | But in that case surely you're saying that we can choose our options (rather than choices being an option) whereas there used to be no choices to choose from-as I see it, what you mean is subtly different to what you actually said in the poem. However, maybe other readers will side with you on this one!
Elli | Name Your Man
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 11th November 2006 | | Name your man, as I named mine - and then we don't have to guess as to who we are talking about. If it is someone in Baghdad, just say so. Or is it a riddle? ha ha PS Do we get a prize if the answer is right? | How pretentious shakermaker!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 11th November 2006 | You use the word phony, I think this is a bit of phony baloney. There's a few sizeable intellects hereabouts who could decipher any riddle you could imagine.
"Choices are an option" is a kind of reverse oxymoron to me, it needn't be said, because if choices weren't an option, then they wouldn't exist. Also "option" suggests that you can choose "choice", but if you don't choose "choice", you've still chosen - not to choose. Its a statement that climbs up its own arse. Silly.
A silly little piece of faux mystery.
Oli
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Written by shakermaker (48 comments posted) 18th November 2006 | Ok Talisker, you've got enough problems from what I've heard for me to be hasty or abusive towards you, but you obviously need to lighten up a little as nowhere have I said this was intellectual, a riddle or anything approaching that.Ok "the clues are there." is suggesting it's a riddle of sorts, but it was tongue in cheek.It's a very simple piece of writing that I'm sure many can see what it's about.
The "choices are an option" line is something you've picked up upon, and in my mind I know what it means. If you don't understand it, then fair enough But I get it. |
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