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Silent Tears
By B.D.
11 November 2006
Sorta long...I just kept going...By the way, it's all imagination - no worries. :)

Am I the only one who cried

When I see my reflection in the mirror?

I can’t bear to look in my own eyes

And I never wanted this to be forever…


I’m still amazed at how tears never dry

And how they leave no trace.

Tonight all my fears have come alive

And I realize I’ll never have a second chance.


Nobody told me; I was never warned

Now everything seems like such a lie.

I never wanted this to be the end…

I never wanted to be alone.

I didn’t think I could cry these tears…

I hadn’t cried in so long.


The blank paper looks so telling,

Like I know what’s on it.

I can’t write what I feel inside…

It feels like a feeling that will never die.


What type of tears are these?

There are 5 types of tears…

Is it regret for all these years?

Sorrow over what I missed?

I hate being my own shoulder…

It was never suppose to be like this.

And when I run for cover,

I just run even further into the mist.

How am I suppose to find myself…

When I keep losing?


Nobody wants to be alone…

But the world won’t stop turning.

Does it even matter…

If its just one person?

I don’t want to face myself

When I know what’s behind my eyes.

I don’t want to think too long…

Afraid of what I might come to find.


Holding on leaves me lonely.

Letting go leaves me lost.

Getting attached gets you hurt.

Yet loving no one leaves you empty.


I’m afraid what I might discover

If I discovered it all.

Nobody is by my side….

I’d have to catch my own fall.

Death seems like a friend…

I died long ago.

I’m the only one who sees beauty in the shadows

Still I bathe in the light.


When I want to run away

I end up at the same place.

I see no point in running anyway

Maybe since I can’t find a good pace.

What’s the point in trying

When nothing is expected?

Is it really worth crying

Especially since its been so long?

I was suppose to let him go…

I was suppose to be happy…

That’s why you shouldn’t wish…

Because wishes come true.

But when it does…

It might not be how you want it to.


Who is really powerful?

Is there such a thing?

What defines as beautiful?

For imperfections there will always be…


I once knew why the caged bird sings…

Now I could care less.

I wanted to save the world…

But I just feel powerless.

When you lose what’s close to you

And if you know you’re who lost it, too.

It tears you up inside…

So much that you just can’t hide.

You must find an escape…

But every place just hurts you so.

When you’re caught in a lie,

Nothing matters since you’re so low.


Catch me in my sleep…

Don’t let me die alone.

If I wander in too deep…

Would you come take me home?

Should I ever start to sink…

Would it matter to you at all?

If I see you on the street…

Would you answer my call?


Is it wrong to want to bleed?

At least you know where it’s coming from…

When you cry silent tears…

They slip into your memory.

When you look in the mirror and see beauty,

You find even more flaws…in those silent tears…


They burn when I close my eyelids…

Yet they run all the same.

Is it wrong to think them beautiful…

Though they cause you pain?

Crying silent tears…crying silently…

Reviews
a few things
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 12th November 2006
..."saw" i think would be better than see 
 
and perhaps "burn" instead of "bathe in the shadows" - bathe seems too positive for your message, but i'm not sure. 
 
I love the song-like quality of this piece. However right now it seems slightly scattered. Some of the lines could do with reading over, and maybe if you spilt into sections it would flow better. 
 
Well written with great imagery, the song thing is something I think you should definitely think about - this would make awesome lyrics, especially the contradictory parts. 
 
good stuff B 
 
x clo x

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