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Poetry
Breathless
By B.D.
12 November 2006
can't really find a good title, any ideas??.....

All my dreams seem useless
when I think of the ones who can't dream.
All my actions seem fearless
when I think of the ones who live in fear.
All my tears seem alone
until I think of the ones who cry constantly.
All the people who are gone
have never meant more to me.
At the end of the day, I may be breathless
but what about those who have just one last breath?
And every night, the sky seems endless
but what about those who have reached their end?

So I dream for the ones who can’t...

Act on behalf of those that don’t...

Smile for the ones that haven’t...
Live for the ones who are gone.

Reviews
Pink Poppycock?
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 13th November 2006
Oli :)

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 13th November 2006
The font on this is hurting my head...I am, admittedly, fairly foul-tempered today but this didn't do anything for me-far too cliched. Too many questions, we didn't really get to hear anything about what you actually think. Sorry to be so negative. 
 
Elli
Hi B.D.
Written by jean.day (2286 comments posted) 27th December 2006
I liked this. I liked the idea of contrasting each of your actions with the inability of someone else to do it.  
 
I sort of think maybe - All my tears seem lonely - would scan better somehow.  
 
The idea behind this is really very deep. I'm not really a poet - but if some of the lines were changed just slightly I think it would read more easily.

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