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Poetry
Good Head
By Tenchi
13 November 2006
I've been doing emotionally charged stuff recently as seems to happen a lot when I get kicked in the heart by the opposite sex. I'm at work and thought I'd try something light. This is the result. Thank you for anyone that reviews anything I do. Your comments are always welcome and I only wits I could gt published, make millions and then spend any free time reading and reviewing other peoples work!
I think winning the lottery is more likely though Laughing

I tried, my love, I really did

but you never gave me credit

you wouldn’t listen, just flipped your lid

or ignored me said ‘forget it’

When you wouldn’t talk it out

you left me with no choice

you’d never let me near about

you’d seldom heed my voice


The image of those tangled sheets

burned hot in to my eyes

I close them; see your forms replete

after listening to your cries

I’d stayed outside, until that point

I’d listened near an hour

rather than interrupt mid coit

as another plucked your flower


Neither he or you, did e'er espy

me creeping to your side

without giving chance to ask you why

the blade it opened wide


You listen now I talk to you

I blame you not at all

enfridged, enfrozen, slightly blue

only now do you heed my call.


I didn’t keep his head my dear

that wouldn’t be ethically sound

It's comforting your head's so near
but I buried his in the ground

Reviews

Written by morley (4 comments posted) 13th November 2006
i'm not the greatest poem reviewer but the ending had me in stitches! 

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 13th November 2006
I think you've found your forte! I enjoyed this very much. 
 
Elli
Rather violent?
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 13th November 2006
I do hope it wasn't you! ha ha. I hope it was only a story. It's a long time in prison for cutting off heads I think. - - And for all the emotional turmoil of youth, one day you forget what it was all about anyway when you think back. Good writing.
I read this...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 14th November 2006
Hoping it was going to be a poetic examination of oral sex! 
 
How naughty you are to disappoint!  
 
"Alas poor yorik, I knew him well. Fellatio" 
 
Oli :p

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 14th November 2006
Funny, enjoyed. Clever (but misleading) title. 
 
Phil.

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