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Home for a Change
By Witzl
15 November 2006

HOME FOR A CHANGE

   The house the girls grew up in wasn’t special at all. It was just a tatty suburban ranch-style house, one in a long row of tract houses that wound their way up a dusty dead-end street.

   Their parents bought the house when it was brand-new and smelled of fresh-laid cement and cheap new wood. On moving day, the three little girls ran excitedly from room to room, opening and shutting the flimsy sliding closet doors. Everything was cheaply new, the bathroom and kitchen fixtures still squeaky clean. Floors gleamed, waiting to be scarred and dented. Linoleum lay flat and un-yellowed, window-glass still bore strips of identifying tape, pipes had yet to feel the rush of water through their lengths.    

   Only a few of the houses were inhabited. Next door to them lived an elderly couple, the MacGregors, whose chief pastime seemed to be spying on the children. Mrs MacGregor would post herself by one window to watch the children leave for school in the morning. Once they had reached the end of their driveway, she would move as quickly as her arthritis would allow her to the front window, where she would stand and stare until they disappeared from view. All the way down the street, the children could feel her eyes on their backs.

   Few of the houses in the tract had trees, save the lone palm the City had planted in everyone’s front yard. You could walk up and down the street and see almost nothing but one palm tree in front of every single house. A few residents had managed to plant cacti and ice plant in their yards, but except for those palms, there was only the odd spindly, stunned-looking tree gasping under the combined force of sun and wind.

   The children’s father planted an elm tree in the front yard and, like many of the neighbors, ice plant along the sides of the house.  Mr and Mrs MacGregor watched their every move. Why an elm? Mr MacGregor asked. The children’s father shrugged and smiled noncommittally. He had chosen an elm tree simply because someone had offered him a free seedling, but he hardly wanted to tell Mrs MacGregor that.

   The soil was poor and the sun and wind were merciless, but a collection of eclectic plants gradually joined the elm and ice plant: a macadamia nut tree dropped prickly leaves that hurt when stepped on but never broke the skin, a pepper tree grew to a staggering height and rained down tiny red peppercorns with dry, papery covers. Rough lemon trees with tough, bumpy-skinned fruit were planted just outside the children’s bedroom windows and cast their butter-and-honey fragrance into the hot night air. Shrubs and bushes shot up in profusion all around the house, and their father, in a fit of enthusiasm, began a cactus garden that he periodically added to in haphazard fashion. An apricot tree grew from a tiny seedling to a fruit-bearing tree, and in the backyard a paper mulberry with great furry leaves grew into a seedling-sprouting monster.  

   The children’s father loved plants and trees but lacked the skill or inclination to arrange them in a harmonious or logical manner. What he created instead – quite unintentionally – was a paradise for his children. Bushes and shrubs sprang up in pathways and grew too close together, creating dense, lush cover. A bougainvillea grew, unchecked and un-pruned, up the patio supports and produced a multitude of blossoms to be woven into cats’ collars and wound around stuffed animals. Mint and weeds grew exuberantly in waist-high patches, making a fragrant adventure playground. Trees were planted willy-nilly, providing shade and hiding places for playing children, but raising the eyebrows of the MacGregors who knew what good gardening was and wasn’t.

   The children did not know that their garden was foolishly crowded with expensive water-guzzling plants and ill-placed trees. They played with their cats under the elm, picked the apricots and rough lemons, and watched fat bees drunk with citrus-lust stumble from lemon blossom to lemon blossom. They chased katydids and grasshoppers in the overgrown mint and squeezed the fat, juicy leaves of the ice plant.

   Near the clothesline grew fig trees; the fruit ripened under the sun, to drop and rot in sticky-sweet heaps under the spreading leaves. Wasps, hummingbirds and dragonflies danced dizzily through the summer haze like airborne jewels. On summer nights, the children and their parents drank iced tea with slices of rough lemon. They gazed at the stars and talked about wasps and fig reproduction. 

   All too soon, their dead-end street disappeared into a rash of new construction. New houses were built – each one with a single palm tree in the front yard – and the street grew, snaking up through the hills and joining even newer streets. The view of the desert and the surrounding hills gave way to a tangle of clotheslines and barbecues.  New people moved into the houses and more trees were planted. And yet their own house looked, to their eyes, completely different from the ones around it, an oasis shrouded in trees, overgrown with bushes and shrubs and cacti.

    The MacGregors’ own front yard was a model of careful planning and chemically-assisted botany, their flower beds seemingly laid out with spirit level and yardstick.   Mr MacGregor looked askance at the father’s messy garden with its shaggy grass and overgrown trees and shrubs. He complained that the snails sheltering in their ice plant attacked his flowers. Their pepper tree shed its papery peppercorns all over their grass; their elm, unsprayed, harboured hairy caterpillars that ended up migrating into Mr MacGregor’s garden.

   Mrs MacGregor kept a sharp eye out for the children’s misdemeanours and warned their mother that they could easily be ruined if the neighborhood ‘went bad.’ Every time the children’s father brought home a new tree to plant in their crowded tree-choked garden, the children could feel the MacGregors eyes on them, watching, judging.

   Only when another family moved in directly across the street did the girls finally escape Mrs MacGregor’s scrutiny. Unlike them and virtually everyone else in their all-white neighborhood, the new people were black. Suddenly the children found that Mrs MacGregor was eager to talk to their parents over the backyard fence. She would even waylay their mother as she arrived home from work or stepped outside with the garbage.

   For years the children and their mother were forced to listen to Mrs MacGregor’s stories about the black family. Where was the father? Where did the family get their money? Mrs MacGregor wanted to know. The black family’s mother left the home every morning in a nurse’s uniform, so the answer seemed obvious, but Mrs MacGregor had her doubts. The noise those children made and the endless comings and goings!  She drank tea with the children’s kindly, long-suffering mother and bent her reluctant ear with silly, baseless gossip and blow-by-blow accounts of the black family’s innocent activities.

   Years passed. The house grew older and shabbier. The cactus garden grew into a no-man’s-land of overgrown and dangerously spiked plants toppling over onto each other, prickles and spears spilling out in all directions in sickly, top-heavy piles. The elm tree barely survived a particularly bad caterpillar infestation. The pepper tree’s roots caused the asphalt driveway to buckle and shatter. Never should have planted it there in the first place, Mr MacGregor grumbled.  

   The macadamia nut tree, however, after a childless decade, suddenly bore fruit, furnishing enough nuts for the entire neighborhood. Shortly after, the children grew up and moved away, one by one; their parents grew old and died, as did the MacGregors.

   Decades later, in a fit of nostalgia, the two younger sisters drove past their old house on a rare trip back to their hometown. They lived far away and had children of their own now, but they could not resist stopping for a look.

   The elm tree was a ragged, overgrown version of its former self. They could see that the macadamia nut tree and rough lemons were gone, as were the cactus garden and palm tree. The grass, no longer indulged by their water-wasteful father, had grown dry and brown and was knee-high in some places. Only the dandelions and foxtails seemed to be flourishing.

    The two women lingered so long in front of the house that the current resident grew curious and came out. The sisters squabbled briefly and discretely, and the older sister won. She approached the stranger shyly. We used to live here – we grew up in this house. We hate to intrude, but would you mind --? The man was kind, happy to show them around. Perhaps they could tell him how the sprinkler system worked?

   It doesn’t work, laughed the older sister. Our father designed it, and he was technologically challenged. He could barely operate a lawn-mower.

   The man took them and their small, bored children, around their old house. Sorry, he apologized, I’m not much of a housekeeper and I haven’t gotten around to decorating yet. This was obvious. All the scars were there still – the long tongue of black metal showing where they’d knocked a strip of enamel off the bathtub, the worn wallpaper a cat had clawed to shreds – but all the joy and mystery of childhood were gone. The fig trees were just an overgrown mess swarming with hornets, the mint a leggy, yellowed tangle of vegetation. Trees had been hacked down, the stumps sticking up everywhere. The paper mulberry had been allowed to get away with murder: far too many seedlings had sprouted and were well entrenched in the thick, dry grass.

   The two women and the man stood looking down at the stump of the macadamia nut tree. It bore fruit for the first time the year I left home, said the older sister, trying to keep her voice level. Macadamia nuts in California – no one believed us!  The man was surprised. A macadamia nut tree! Is that what it was? I took it out because my children didn’t like it. They kept hurting their feet on the leaves.  

   He and his wife were separated, the man told them. He only got the kids over the weekends, so he wanted to keep them happy. The women nodded. They were mothers, so they understood, but part of them – the part that had loved that tree – secretly thought: Wimps.

   Why had she insisted on looking at the house, the older sister wondered. She felt like weeping from sadness and disappointment. So much was the same, but paradoxically everything was different. The house looked so old and shabby. Had it always been that shabby? And there was no magic in it at all.

   The sisters thanked the man for showing them around, apologized for the sprinkler system and its incomprehensible workings. They were on the verge of taking leave when the older sister mentioned the MacGregors next door. Two elderly people with too much time on their hands, she told the man. And terrible racists, too:  Mrs MacGregor was so incensed when a black family moved in across the street.

   Both families are still there, the man told them. Nell’s retired now; she lives there with her son and his children. And as for the MacGregors, the children and grandchildren of the couple you knew live there now. They’re not racists; they get on famously with Nell’s grandchildren – you ought to see those kids playing together – in and out of each other’s house all the time.

   As if on cue, a black child came toddling out of the MacGregors’ house. The child crouched down and examined an ants’ nest, taking no notice of the two sisters and their children or the man they were talking to. Soon, a middle-aged woman came out, a younger, sweeter-looking version of Mrs MacGregor. She took the child’s hand and the two crossed the street together.

   The sisters watched them go, hand in hand, two inhabitants of a different world.

 

Reviews
Dreamy...
Written by Talisker (1320 comments posted) 15th November 2006
Lovely read.  
 
I think we've all had thoughts of revisiting childhood haunts. Most of us can only do it in dream time. 
 
I loved it Witzl. You have such a special touch. Magical! 
 
Oli :)
Great writing.
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 15th November 2006
Me too, Mary. Oli has hit the nail on the head. 
 
Leave aside the soapbox for the megaphone men. This is what you do best. And here back to it wonderfully. I always feel reading your narrative work that it so suits the spoken voice. I can hear it being read aloud. A friend on the radio chatting alongside and telling me a thundering good tale. Its a natural skill, you can't acquire it. Effortlessly executed, like all the best prose with no pretention to literatutre.  
 
My hat off to you.  
 
Slan!
All in the detail
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3294 comments posted) 15th November 2006
There is a woman on radio 4, I think her name is Lorelei 
King who has a lilting mid-western accent and reads a lot of their stories. I could hear her voice in my head as I read this. A very easy and addictive read. It was all the little details and bits of information that made the story come alive for me and the delightful understatement; small lives big emotions was my first reaction and that is what you have managed here. I was quite affected by this 
cheers 
BBS
Fauna Galore
Written by johniebg (538 comments posted) 15th November 2006
It amazes me how often people neglect the most important paragraph of a story. In your first sentence you mention house three times and it took away from the dialogue. Playing around with the words a little produces something a little easier on the palate, I suspect many will disagree;  
 
'The house the girls grew up in wasn’t special at all. It was just a tatty ranch style, one in a long tract winding their way up a dusty dead-end street.' 
 
As an essay this was a tour de force for suburbian fauna but just didn't give you any actual story to cling to. There were lots of tree's and cacti, loads of description but apart from mentioning the garden was a paradise and talking about the nosey neighbours interest in the black family, you did not give us any emotion that resonated when they went back. Maybe some play on the games they made in the paradise, cuts and bruises, of hanging from tree's, of leaving, of some sorrow, the dead cat in the road etc etc 
 
Very visual as ever. Apologies for any spelling misdemeanors.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 15th November 2006
I loved this, it read in quite a detached manner but that didn't matter to me. I felt transported to that place. A thoroughly enjoyable read. 
 
Elli

Written by peeano1 (86 comments posted) 15th November 2006
This is really nice and has such great detail to it. I really liked how you used words that didn't make the story too overpowering, if you know what I mean. It had a really good moral to it and was very meaningful. Well, I'm probably not much of a help when it comes to advices, considering you're a better writer than I am. So, good job on the story! I really liked it.
I must take issue...
Written by Talisker (1320 comments posted) 16th November 2006
With Johnie be good, it's obvious to those who managed interpretation beyond primary school level, that the vegetation was central to the story in a metaphorical way. The contrast in gardening approaches between the neighbours, the significance attached to the garden by the children. Most symbolic was the macademia nut tree, which clearly represented irreversible change.  
 
So the "suburban fauna" was not superfluous, indeed it was central. 
 
Oli :roll

Written by coosh (844 comments posted) 16th November 2006
Right up my street, as it were, Witzl. Really enjoyed the way you built this up from a blank canvas to a whole mass of beautiful, lush clutter. And then moved on to decay, cycle, evolution, regeneration, etc. I also liked the idea of the neighbours trying to protect their so-called "morally upstanding" and ordered neighbourhood and garden from being infringed by "unsavoury" elements ranging from new residents to snails and caterpillars. Personally, the emphasis on "house" at the beginning worked for me and fitted with the overall mood and style of the story. As with the Rat and the Avocadoes, these types are pieces are your forte, and make engrossing reading. Cheers.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 16th November 2006
Thank you, everyone -- good, thoughtful comments. I am blessed. 
 
Thank you, Gerard -- don't plan on getting rid of the soapbox, but I'm glad you liked this. And thank you, also, Oli, BBS, Elli, peeano, & Coosh. 
 
Doggone it, Johnie, I left out all the fauna (lizards, rattlesnakes, horny toads, garter snakes, California quail, road runners, and jack rabbits), and it really cost me to do it! I agree with you about the redundancy of the word 'house,' but the truth is, I rewrote that first sentence more times than I want to admit. I do know that you meant 'flora'. . . Part of me wants to say 'Oli's right -- I put all those plants and trees in on purpose!' And part of me actually did do that, but the thing is, that house was so much about all the weird vegetation that I just couldn't leave them out. I took almost all of the plant references out and the whole thing fell flat. So I put them back in.  
 
I blame it on the margarine ...
Written by johniebg (538 comments posted) 17th November 2006
.. green fingers apparently were not inherited. Just checked the meaning of fauna, thats funny, pinkish glow to my cheeks. 
 
Note to johnie - add dictionary and thesarus to christmus list 
 
:)

Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 18th November 2006
Absolutely loved this. The best thing I've read by you or anyone else on Short Stories for quite some time. Its tone and delivery were perfect for me. 
 
Brilliant. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

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