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Super Star
By peeano1
19 November 2006
I don't know if this is any good at all..At least it doesn't relate to the supernatural stuff.....


"We send super star, Lindsey Rafael our most sincere blessings and hope she can recover from her fatal loss."1

I stared wearily at the screen. After a few more words, I turned the screen off. They didn't understand anything.2

In my suite, I stared out into the sky. Everything seemed to be gone. The glow and shine of life was gone. I felt my heart shatter to pieces that could never be put back together.3

Taking a sip of wine, I walked towards the bathroom and turned on the faucet of the bath. Pouring soap into the tub, I waited until the tub was full. Lowering my body, I closed my eyes and drifted.4

"Daddy, I want to be a super star", the little girl announced.5

Her dad smiled proudly down at her. "But you already are, my sweet."6

She pouted her lips and folded her arms around her chest. "But I want to be a real one, in front of other people."7

He swooped her up into his arms and tickled her nose. "My dear, you will be a super star when you grow up. And when you are, you will be the center of attention and I will be very proud that my dearest daughter has made it. But don't you forget your daddy when you become a super star, okay?"8

The girl giggled. "Okay, Daddy. How will I ever forget you?"9

By the time she was in kindergarten, the girl had always been the drama queen of the class. So much to the point, her teacher had suggested she take some acting lessons.10

"Daddy, watch this!" The girl held up her hand to her forehead and pretended to faint. Just before she landed on the bed, her dad caught her off of her feet and threw her in the air. 11

"That's my girl!" Screaming delightly, she tugged his hair as he spun her around in circles.12

"I love you, Daddy."13

"Me too, my sweet."14

Years had passed and the girl was previewed in nearly all the school dramas. By middle school, she had landed a role in the Broadway production of Annie. Playing the main role, the audience was amazed by the girl's ability to act.15

"She is such an angel", one woman commented. 16

When the curtains fell down to wrap up the show, the audience threw flowers and gifts to the girl. She bowed excitedly before returning to the backstage. Her father, who was in the front row, beamed at his child. 17

"My dear child", he exclaimed, "You are making Daddy proud."18

During high school, she had become the school's most popular girl. Everywhere, people knew who she was. Local towns posted articles about her and it wasn't too soon when she met a scout one day. He was impressed by her amazing talent and automatically made an offer she couldn't refuse.19

The following year, she made her first movie. It was an immediate success. Critics raved about the movie.20

"Daddy, I made it", she exclaimed on the day of her premiere.21

"Yes you did", he replied.22

They embraced but were soon separated by the photographers and media. She waved back at him. He slightly smiled.23

As her fame grew, he saw less and less of her. She traveled all over the world to make appearances and movies. Only once in a while did they ever meet in person. He frequently sent letters to his dear daughter and was full of joy when she replied. When he watched her on the television, memories of the past came to his thoughts that it brought tears to his eyes. His little girl was growing up.24

The old man stared at the window. He wondered restlessly when his daughter would show up. It had been nearly 30 minutes since she said she would arrive. Tapping the window sill impatiently, he decided to pour himself a cup of coffee. His movements were slow and it took much strength to get to the kitchen. Suddenly, he felt pain surge in his chest. Gripping the wall near him, he staggered back before tripping face forward. Before he went, he whispered, "Linsey, I love you", and closed his eyes.25

Lindsey waited impatiently for the limo to arrive. Unfortunately, her private jet was delayed about an hour and her limo was stuck in traffic. She was in a hurry to avoid the media and photographers. They were squirming around her everywhere. The one person she wanted to see was her father.26

Finally, the limo pulled up and she slid inside. The ride to her father's house was only 15 minutes away. Checking to see if she looked alright, she rested her head on the back cushion and gave out a sigh of relief.27

The limo arrived at the house and Lindsey rushed to the door. She rang the doorbell but there was no answer. 28

"He probably forgot", she thought. Remembering where the spare keys were, she lifted the flower pot and went inside.29

"Maybe I could surprise him", she muttered to herself.30

But before she could think of any surprise, she stopped at the doorway. To her horror, her dear father was lying motionless on the floor. Hurrying to his side, she called for help. The chaffeaur was immediately by her side. The medics were called and soon, his body was lifted to the hospital.31

By his bedside, she cried and prayed his life would be spared. After checking his pulse, the doctor delivered the news. He was dead. Sinking to the ground, Lindsey wept. Her father she loved was gone.32

"It was my fault", she whispered. "It was my fault."33

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Written by peeano1 (86 comments posted) 24th November 2006
Editing in process................... :x :? :eek :zzz :sigh

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