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The Proposal
By patterjack
20 November 2006
An old cartoon joke from Punch retold as a short story

The Proposal

She stood by the ironing board , and lifted one of his shirts to check it for any creases she may have left in it . Apparently it needed some stitching around the collar, and she sighed to think that even after long years of advising , even begging him not to drag the shirt off by the collar without at least loosening a couple more buttons , he had never managed to learn .

Of course , he would have called it nagging . Just as he called it nagging when she asked him to hang his clothes up tidily , instead of leaving them in heaps on the bedroom floor . He couldn't even be bothered to put the dirty clothes in the dirty clothes basket in the laundry . She was forever finding long worn socks under the bed , often after she had stumbled over the shoes he had left beside it .

Still , one more try .

Look at this , she said . This isn't really an old shirt , now is it ? there's still ages of wear in it. I'll have to turn the collar on it , but I suppose you'll have the stitches pulled in next to no time . I don't know . Why can't you be just a little bit more careful ?

She glanced over to where he sat at the kitchen table , reading the sports pages of the newspaper spread out on it.

He didn't look up , just grunted , picked up the paper and swivelled around on his chair, holding the pages so that it prevented her from seeing his face . With a gesture of exasperation , she tossed the shirt aside and picked up another garment to lay on the ironing board . She felt she had to restrain herself from any outbursts of temper or even mild petulance . The occasion was too important to allow an argument to develop .

She allowed a couple of minutes to pass , the silence broken only by the thump of the iron on the board , and the slight rustle as he turned the pages of his paper . He wasn't too bad as a companion , she thought . He had provided well for her and their two daughters . Every now and then he had a few too many with his male friends , but she was pretty positive that there had never been any other women .

I don' t suppose , she thought , that he would cut much of a dash with younger women. If he ever had anything to say about them it was more critical than appreciative . Did he ever feel the temptation to have a fling ?

She considered herself critically . The sex appeal she might once have had was very much a thing of the past . Of course the babies had come too close together for her to ever regain her figure, and she never had much sense of style her daughters told her . If sexual allure was what was needed to hold a man , she frankly admitted to herself that she had none.

I'm a frump , she thought . I need something to lift my spirits.

But then , casting her eye over the balding , paunchy man absorbed in his sports page , she thought it highly unlikely that some young siren would come along and whirl him away . Whirl ! that would be the day ! He had about as much to offer to women as she had to offer to men .

Nevertheless , the time had come to lay the cards on the table , as so many of the women in her magazine reading seemed so capable of doing .

She carefully put down the iron on its heel , and moved around the board to confront the shield of the newspaper .

Now , she said . The girls are both married . We only have ourselves to worry about for a while

The paper slowly began to lower .

With them married , don't you think it's time we got married too ?

The paper dropped completely and she met a stare of incomprehension .

Good God Almighty , he said , who would want to marry either of us ?

Reviews
Funny!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 20th November 2006
:p  
 
Brightened up my morning Brian. Done with your customary aplomb. 
 
Oli

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 20th November 2006
I loved this. Scared the cat off my lap with my hoot of laughter, though.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 20th November 2006
It's all in the telling. I thought you set it up well and kept the tension and the punch line didn't disappoint. With mention of the ironing board I thought it was a different joke so the end really caught me out 
cheers 
J

Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 20th November 2006
Funny little story. Not much to add to what's already been said :)

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 20th November 2006
Enjoyed this Brian, it made me laugh. Didn't spot the gag either. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Snodlander (501 comments posted) 20th November 2006
Didn't see it at all, even though I knew there was a gag coming. 
 
Good one

Written by peeano1 (86 comments posted) 20th November 2006
I agree with the others. No further comment. :grin

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