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Poetry
Night
By peeano1
21 November 2006
I don't know if this makes any sense or is any good.

  When the evening falls, the daylight is fading
  Within me calls for the coming of the night
  All these years waiting, for the time to come
  I yearn for its mist
  I yearn for its soothing call
  The time is near and I feel a cool rush deep inside me
  The last of the rays of light dies down
  The stars are soon to come
  They are my companions as I am their leader
  Night whispers to me
  I rise from my wake and reach towards my home
  The home I belong and forever am bound to

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Hey Peeano
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 20th November 2006
If you don't know if it makes sense, who else will? 
 
Some good lines, but does it "hang together"? What are you trying to tell me? 
 
"Rise from your wake" - do you mean from the dead? I'm not too sure. With the obscurity of some of the poems on here this will probably go down well with those who feel that reader interpretation can make up for lack of writer focus. I don't belong to that school of thought, I want to know what the writer is saying to me, not to impose my own meaning.  
 
Having said all that, its got a certain something, even to my half-asleep brain at 3.54 am local time. 
 
Oli :)

Written by peeano1 (86 comments posted) 20th November 2006
I had sort of thought it was the moon....It's 3:54 in the morning at your time? Wow, it's only 9:33 at night right now...

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