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Beware the cynic's verse
By ellipinnock
21 November 2006
A light-hearted piece, not meant to be taken seriously :) Needs to be read aloud really, it's not so good on the page (not that I'm saying ti's any good off the page mind you!)

It's a good job I own a rhyming dictionary.
I know it's lumpy in places, it is unpolished (to put it politely) but then you can't polish a turd :) 

I have, I must admit
a cynical disposition.
Poetry, to me, must be
more than a manumission
for the poet's tortured soul.
There may be erudition, exposition,
the fruition of a lifetime of attrition
but there must also be the recognition
that we are not all tacticians, pouring
over each submission,
willing to forgive sins of omission
if the words seem smart enough.

For poetry, you see,
is not sudoku,
even a haiku must contain some clue
to let the reader through
into the hidden meaning.
Why use a host of adjectives
when one or two will do?
Why talk about a bounding mound
of ceaseless energy
when what you really mean
is a bloody big grey kangaroo?

Long live the extended metaphor,
the sly allusion, carefully crafted illusion
but let them not become a foregone conclusion
or we may find ourselves accused
of pretension and lack of attention
to the comprehension of the reader.

'Wordsmiths' beware for there are dragons
lurking here.

Reviews
Hehhehhehe
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 21st November 2006
Very fine sweet Elli  
 
I've said something similar elsewhere. 
 
There are charlatans amongst us. Don't buy the snake oil! 
 
Oli :grin
for a moment
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 21st November 2006
I thought you were heading into Tom Lehrer country 
 
patterjack
Hi Elli
Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 21st November 2006
What fun reading this - and I expect you also had great fun writing it.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 21st November 2006
"I thought you were heading into Tom Lehrer country"  
 
Wow no higher praise can be given than that and from the best poet on the site too. I'll defer to that and just add that it was one of the most enjoable reads I've had in the poetry forum for a number of reasons 
Bloody hell a rhyming dictionary ?I'd didn't know you could get one, whatever will they think of next.You couldn't tell the other poets the ISBN number....please 
cheers 

For BBS
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st November 2006
come again please :) 
 
For BBS: 
 
For those who have the curse 
and feel the need to write in verse 
and worse 
but seem to spend too much time 
searching for a word to rhyme 
 
never fear, 
help is here 
upon the world wide web: 
 
0-500-27030-9 
 
Thanks to the rest fo you lot as well :) 
 

 
ps. I apologise for the abysmal poetry above...wish I had an alter ego to blame it on but unfortunately it's all my own work.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 21st November 2006
A poet with a sense of humour, you're a treasure, Elli 
You have,of course sussed out why I hide behind a fake name.
Damn it
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st November 2006
that's where I'm going wrong...I need a fake name. No, really I do, I just googled my username and was horrified to find 3 pages worth of my activities in various internet domains-scary shit.  
 
E
Most exquisitely put, My Dear Pinnock.
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 21st November 2006
Yup. Bull's Eye, Miss Ellie. If you want to OD on bald headed pretentiousness; contrived verbosity and plain ol' fashioned pompous drivel, look no further than the Poetry Forum.  
 
Mind its the same anywhere. A small number of genuinely gifted comminicators amidst a sea of stunning indifference and even awash with those for whom competence would be a welcome achievement. I have never got my head around the notion that because you can spell, you can write. GW is the best site of its kind I know of. Yet even here it is not difficult to see why commercial publishers reject so many manuscripts. Contrary to popular mythology I think they get it right almost every time. 
 
Nice one Elli. 
 
Slan!
I object!
Written by Fledermaus (3307 comments posted) 21st November 2006
I'm a mediocre poet, but I enjoy practicing it. I treat it like a sudoku :p
I object too!!!
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 21st November 2006
What if my bloody big grey kangaroo WANTS to be a bounding mound of ceaseless energy? Huh?  
 
Tee hee. :grin  
 
Enjoyed this! 
 
JAN x

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 21st November 2006
Thanks for this one Elli. I thought I was getting thicker by the poem. Between you and Oli you've given me some short term relief. I thought I was losing it. Never the brightest bulb in the box, I thought my filament had gone. (Is that an extended metaphor?) 
 
Enjoyed the poem - although I had to reach for the dictionary for 'manumission.' 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
Tough shit
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st November 2006
He can't-'cos he's a kangaroo, OK?! :) 
 
Thanks to both 
 
Phil-I had to look up manumission too to check I knew what it meant :) Very nice extended metaphor- 10 points :) 
 
E
yay!
Written by fellpony (1617 comments posted) 6th February 2007
Others suffer too. Well said Elli - for a fast and furious rant, good stuff.  
 

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