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Gastric Love
By Talisker
21 November 2006
Just fun

Your poems are as sweet corn niblets,
They pass through me undigested.

Your sweet lies are as sugar puffs,
I smell their sickly scent in my pee.

Your tears are as prunes to me,
They move me deeply.

But our relationship is like a hot curry,
A gastric tsunami

Oli 21/11/06

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Written by Garrulous (108 comments posted) 21st November 2006
I think there's some cryptic message in here that I don't understand. 
 
:grin  
 
Gar.
Huh?
Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 21st November 2006
Didn't quite get it either. Do you have a girlfriend who's hot, but who can't rhyme?

Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 21st November 2006
Just a half baked notion to compare the digestive with the emotive.  
 
The stanzas don't really inter-relate. The first one came to me, I won't say exactly when, but at the time I was considering the inscrutability of some poetical work. 
 
The other stanzas are just observation on the effects of different foods. 
 
Oli :roll

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st November 2006
Metaphorical toilet roll and wet wipes at the ready :) 
 
(your undigested sweetcorn niblets was not an image I particularly wanted in my mind...) 
 
E
Yuck....
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 21st November 2006
wooops..
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 21st November 2006
...as I was saying... 
 
Yuck - not sure we needed to know! :grin  
 
Clever though I suppose... 
 
JAN x

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 21st November 2006
[I]Some poems are like Newcastle Brown: 
A sure cure for constipation.[I] 
 
(But not this one.) 
 
Lked the second particularly. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 21st November 2006
Sorry about the silly [I] bits. I thought I'd be clever and try to put in italics without using the long shortcut. Clearly didn't work.
Newcastle Brown
Written by patterjack (1328 comments posted) 21st November 2006
I saw the following graffito in Newcastle itself : 
 
If you think the bottom has dropped out of your world --  
 
Drink Newcastle Brown Ale  
 
And you'll think the world has dropped out of your bottom  
 
 
Not sure why I have remembered it for 26 years ! 
 
patterjack

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