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By gutterkitty
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21 November 2006 |
Though I'd post a short one for a change.
December, and I abandon the warmth of home,
Christmas lights, the cheap glitter of tinsel,
and clichéd mistletoe kisses
for the bite of the night,
the sharp pinprick of stars
and the heat of your December kiss.
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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st November 2006 | One pedantic point-do you need to capitalise 'For'? Thought this was very good.
E | Me too...
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 21st November 2006 | Maybe it has something to do with my limited brain span, but I love short poems and this one is very nice.
JAN x |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 21st November 2006 | Really liked this. Again, it struck a chord.
All the best,
Phil. | It'll be all bite on the night!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 21st November 2006 | Nice and suck sinks.
Lots of kisses squeezed into six lines. I preferred the hot December variety to the cliched mistletoe, but beggars can't be choosers, so I'll pucker up for either.
"sharp pinprick stars" sums up a clearly frosty night in three words.
Altogether very nice!!   (5.10am) |
Written by Clifftown (620 comments posted) 22nd November 2006 | | I really liked this, great use of words in a short but effective poem. |
Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 25th November 2006 | liked the last verse better than the first one.. the images are lovely.. especially "pinprick of stars"
very nice..
Fran |
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