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By nitenattc
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24 November 2006 |
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Snowing, snowing, yet
in bright moonlight weathered pines
bow before the One.
The crimson leaf
floats slowly by, listen!
Autumn whispers.
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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 23rd November 2006 | Loved the second, but I don't think it's a haiku. Who cares? Lovely.
Phil. | Agree with Phil
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Both are nice, as I understand it (not much!) Haikus are supposed to have 17 syllables - the first one does (as I read it)but not the second.
Nice never the less, well done.
Oli  |
Written by Fledermaus (3307 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | | I agree with Phil here. I liked the second, eventhough, as Oli points out, it's not a haiku. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Agree with the others, nice imagery, particularly int he second but syllable count seems to be wrong for a haiku
Elli
ps. If you are looking for good examples, look at patterjacks haiku collection |
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