Monologue that serves as the introduction to my larger work. Works completely on its own I hope. Still don't quite know where to put something like this. Short story? Extended work without the extension? Suggestions for where? Perhaps there should be a draft category.
Crits please. Happy turkey.
NARRATOR: For some of us it’s a monologue. For others its an audition, others perhaps an intermission. Maybe a scripted drama, unscripted reality show, first grade recital, broadway musical, indie flick, silent film, romantic comedy. We memorize our lines, cake on our makeup, layer on costumes for this thing we call life. A room full of actors, a room full of spotlights. Everyone too busy with their own boring routine to ever pay attention to someone else. Even those that manage to gain an audience wither into wrinkles under the glare of too many stage lights. Regardless whose watching, regardless the length or the costars or the critical acclaim, each of us has our own time under the lights. We dance, we play, we rant, we rave. Then it’s over. Whether it comes as a twist ending that leaves our audience gasping or a predictable joyous standing ovation, it arrives. It stands stage left, behind the curtains, just out of sight of the applauding audience. It lets us collect our roses, our goodbyes, our selves. There’s no cane yanking us off stage. There’s no trap door that opens the ground beneath you, unless, of course, your life is an Andrew Lloyd Weber musical. When we’ve drawn it out as long as we can, it nods. A spectator might witness it as a passive congratulatory recognition. It’s not. [sic]. It’s a signal. It’s time – final bow, final breath. We lives this life, with all of its drama, so the last thing we hear before we die is “curtains”. |
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Life indeed is but a stage, and we are merely players, Performers and portrayers, each another's audience, upon the gilded stage... Rush - Limelight - From Moving Pictures 1981 I quote the above as it follows a similar theme. Obviously Shakespeare inspired Rush. I don't know how to review this really. Thoughtful, but very short - perhaps an idea to be expanded. Oli | Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3459 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | I like monologues, there's no quicker way into character but they can get dreary and are best on the short side as this one was; as an introduction it works well, as Talisker said. I think the conversational style was correct and the images worked. But it did come across as an introduction rather than a self contained work cheers J | Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Amazingly enough, I was completely thrown by your comment 'Happy turkey.' Now, suddenly, it has clicked, and boy, do I feel stupid. Shows just how long I've been away from the Old Country. I liked this very much, though I did find it a little pessimistic. Many of us do occasionally peek out of our own boring routines to look at someone else's. But it is true: our days are numbered, and we all dance, play, rant and rave, to some extent. Now it's my turn to be pessimistic: sometimes we are NOT allowed to collect our roses, our goodbyes -- or ourselves. So a qualifier like 'usually' would be in order there. Back to my Andrew Lloyd Weber musical of a life, now -- nice idea, that, and certainly the way I want to live. | Written by Snodlander (507 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Nice, I enjoyed it. It would work as a prologue, or even an epilogue, to a longer piece A couple of pedantic notes: I tripped over 'costars', even looking it up in the dictionary. Duh! I was pronouncing it in my head as cost-ars. Perhaps 'co-stars' would help aged brains like me. 'Regardless whose watching'. Who's (a contraction of who is) rather than whose. | Written by Phil (6851 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Completely with Snods on this. Epilogue or prologue. His notes are just as relevant for me. Still, I enjoyed it. Phil. |
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