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Thank you for Christmas
By Witzl
24 November 2006
I'm cheating by posting this here -- this is a kids' story. If you don't want to suffer through it, click off -- I'll never know! But if you do read it, I would love your honest reactions and opinions -- even if they are disgust and outrage.

T H A N K   Y O U   F O R   C H R I S T M A S       (999 words)
 

   ‘Who gave you the puzzle?’ asked Mom. It was Christmas morning and I was sitting in front of the Christmas tree surrounded by a whole bunch of presents. Some of them I’d already opened, like the Game Boy I was playing with.

   ‘Michael!’ Mom asked again. ‘Was that train puzzle from Aunt Alice? Or did she give you the book on elephants?’

   I was busy with my Game-Boy, so I didn’t look up.

   ‘Hey, I’m talking to you, Michael’ said Mom again. ‘And by the way, who gave you that Game Boy?’

   ‘You,’ I answered. Duh!

   ‘Did you say “thank you?”’ she asked me.

   ‘What?’

   ‘Did you thank me?’ she repeated, taking a deep breath. ‘For the Game Boy?’

   ‘Oh. Uh, well – I don’t remember.’

   ‘Neither do I,’ said Mom. She sounded kind of grouchy. She went out of the room, then came back a minute later with a pad of paper and a pencil.

   ‘Okay,’ she said, ‘let me know when you want to open the rest of your presents.’

   I looked up at her. ‘Why?’

   ‘Because I want to show you how to do something first, before you open them. Something very important.’

   ‘What?’ I asked.

   ‘How to write a thank-you note,’ says Mom, all nice, like she’s offering me a plate of cookies. ‘It’s about time you learned.’

   I groaned. I mean, wouldn’t you groan too? ‘Mom!  It’s Christmas!’

   ‘Yes,’ she answered. ‘I noticed. And Christmas is all about giving, as you well know.’ She frowned as she looked around the room, taking in all the presents, opened and unopened.

   ‘Nobody expects me to write stuff on Christmas!’ I said. But Mom just shook her head.

   ‘You get presents at Christmas,’ she continued, ‘so I think it’s a good time to say thank you to everybody who sent you something. This way you’re giving too, in a way. When you send someone a thank-you note, you’re giving them something really unusual, something really special.’

   ‘I can say thank you on the phone!’ I yelled. ‘I can e-mail them!  I can text!’

   Mom nodded. ‘Sure, go ahead and do that too. I don’t mind.’

   ‘But nobody sends thank-you notes anymore!’

   ‘Yeah,’ says Mom, ‘that’s true. They are rare nowadays. So like I said, thank-you notes are something really special. Just think of how pleased everyone will be when they get your letter.’

   ‘But can’t I do it after I open the presents? Like tomorrow? Or the day after tomorrow?

   ‘Like last year when I asked you to write thank-you notes?’ said Mom, raising her eyebrows. ‘Or the year before?’

   Oops – I’d forgotten! Too bad Mom hadn’t.

   ‘No, Michael,’ she said, shaking her head. ‘Do it now and get it over with. You’ll only have to write one short note for every present you open. Surely that’s not too hard for a smart kid like you?’

 

   Do you know what she made me do? She made me write a thank-you note then and there. Before I opened another present, I had to write to my Aunt Alice and thank her for her stupid train puzzle. It took me ages. And I had a lot more presents to open, too. 

   ‘Who’s this one from?’ asked Mom, two packages and two thank-you notes – and two hours – later. My fingers were already killing me, so I was taking a break. A long break. Mom was holding up a present with shiny red paper and gold ribbon.

   ‘Uncle Isaac,’ I told her. I couldn’t wait to open it, either. He always sends great stuff.

   ‘Right then,’ says Mom, ‘You get that note to Grandma written, and you can open this one next.’

   ‘Oh, Mom!’ This was going to take forever!

   ‘Michael, no one has to send you all this stuff. People send you presents because they love you, because they want you to have something that you’ll enjoy. And lots of kids –’

   ‘I know, I know,’ I said. ‘Lots of kids in the world don’t get anything for Christmas.’ I do know this too ‘cause Mom is always telling me about all the stuff lots of kids don’t have. She tells me a couple of times a month at least.

   Mom just stared at me. ‘Well, they don’t,’ she said flatly. She stared at all the presents under the tree. ‘And nothing for Christmas is just for starters, too. No food, no schools, no place to live – sometimes they don’t even have clean water to drink. It’s not your fault, Michael, but doesn’t it seem wrong for you to have all these presents when there are kids in this world who don’t even have pencils?

   I shrugged and sighed. I mean, I’ve never met those kids.

   ‘Just think,’ said Mom, ‘if I took all these presents back to the stores they came from, I’ll bet I could feed a whole village with the money I got…’.

   I stared up at her. She looked kind of thoughtful. Like she meant business.

   ‘Okay, okay, what should I say to Grandma?’ I asked quickly. Mom stared back down at me again.

   ‘Dear Grandma,’ she began, in her robot voice. ‘The green sweatshirt you sent me is really awesome…’.

   I sighed. Grandma’s green sweatshirt sucked, but I started writing anyway. It did take forever, too.

   That night when I went to bed there were still twelve presents I hadn’t opened yet. And I had a stack of thank-you cards to mail, too, along with a donation Mom was making to a Christmas charity. She says her money will help to dig a well in a town where they don’t have any water.  That’s my Mom for you. Giving someone a well for Christmas. I bet they’ll be thrilled.

   Anyway, it’s all over now and I’m grateful for that. I’ll bet I’ve made you more grateful now, too. Grateful you don’t have my Mom.

 

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 24th November 2006
Well, sweetie I think this is slightly more heartfelt than you are letting on Tell, me did you ever do this or wish you had done it, doesn't matter.I thought it was cute story and well told.You got into the mindset of the child well. I could actually sympathise with both points of view. 
It wasn't written in a patronising way so I think a kid would be happy to read this and smile at it. 
I suppose it was sort of hy-brid story halfway between adult and child but I'm not sure it's a bad thing. It hasn't done JK Rowling any harm 
And I'm glad you didn't give it a "Mushy" ending 
cheers 
J

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 24th November 2006
BBS, I am nervous telling you this (I know you work with children!) but this is exactly what we did. Stilll do, in fact. When our children were small, we got depressed every Christmas watching them tear through piles of presents. We began to refer to Christmas as 'Greed-fest.' My husband and I think enough of Christmas to find this sort of thing depressing, so we worked out a way to slow down the whole process. We have found that this works a treat. In Japan, we were able to take the cards to the post office and mail them on Christmas Day. 
 
We have told others about this, and the reaction has been mixed, to say the least. From 'What a great idea!' to 'Your poor children!' Then for two consecutive years, we went down to the Cotswolds to have Christmas with my husband's brother and his family, and we could not do this there. To our amazement, the kids told us that they wanted to be at home for Christmas, that they missed writing thank-you cards. They are normal, obnoxious kids -- not terribly geeky or do-goody at all -- so I consider this a huge success and heartily recommend it to other parents.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 24th November 2006
What a great idea - and - your poor children. I've got much admiration: first for admitting it, secondly for actually doing it. As a kid, I always wrote thank you notes (not on the day) it was the expected thing and as I didn't get many presents, it wasn't that much trouble. Maybe I even enjoyed it. Can't remember that clearly. Getting mine to do it now can be a bit trying. They are thankful, just not in the write a note way! 
 
Thought this a well written piece and enjoyed it. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
Fantastic
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 24th November 2006
I'm going to keep this one for when I have kids! My mother usually waited until at least Boxing Day-not much longer mind. Very good, as Jane says, for kids and adults alike. 
 
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HI Witzl
Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 25th November 2006
I'm not quite sure how I react to this. We made lists and the kids had to write letters - I think maybe they didn't get their next week's pocket money until they did it or something like that. And if you got your kids to the stage where they appreciated things more and even now write thank you notes, then you did well. 
 

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 25th November 2006
We made lists too, at first. But then we found that getting the kids to sit down and write the notes was an exhausting business requiring plenty of parental imput, and on Christmas day, they still went through their presents too quickly. So we decided to make it radical and say, 'one present at a time, and moreover, presents from one person at a time.' And (this sounds awfully soppy, but it is 100% true) we even discussed that person and why we were happy to have him/her as a friend or relative. Our kids were pretty close to puberty when they figured out that not everyone did this. But by then, bless them, it was too late. I think it is likely that they will even do something like this with their own kids. . . 
 
Don't report us to the Children's Services! It's worked for us -- might not work for others.

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