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Some souls are just too special....... |
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By Heidi
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24 November 2006 |
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Some souls are just too special to be kept from heaven's gates, for god had strange intentions for the hearts that he creates. Each tear that comes with grieving must be shed for a new day, those souls high up in heaven they will always show the way. Their time must be remembered for the joy and love they gave and we must celebrate their life and be so very brave. But, no-one is alone in what seems such deep despair for friends will give us strength and aid to show how much they care. The bonds will not be broken though the distance, it has grown. One half of you is still that soul, the closeness too has grown and if you ever feel alone their love will radiate, some souls are just too special to be kept from heaven's gates. |
Written by Clifftown (620 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Beautiful sentiments...I can imagine this poem being read to children, or at a funeral. The line "some souls are just too special to be kept from heaven's gates" is so lovely and comforting, even for atheists like myself! Well done | Written by Garrulous (108 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | I was at a funeral earlier today and as Clifftown says it would not have been out of place. A lovely poem. Well you've done marriage and death so what's next? Gar. | Delightful Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | | I thought both of your poems were delightful. Only one small thing I would mention: Having taught typewriting, the rhyming lines should be indented three spaces from the margin and new lines should start with a capital letter - - but that is such a small thing to mention. I only say it because it makes your poem look more professional. Absolutely delightful! | Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | Lovely sentiments, though I'm an atheist ( ) but ditto the last one, I cant get it to scan rythmically in couplets, it starts ok but get lost midway. Oli | Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | | Very nice. Repeating the first line at the end was a good idea. Gives it something of a song. | Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | They are nice sentiments. It scans and rhymes. It's competent. However, I can see this on the back of a tea towel. Sorry if that sounds awful. I guess it's not my style. Everyone else seems to like it, so well done. Phil. | Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 24th November 2006 | I thought both your poems were very nice, filled with beautiful thoughts. Best wishes, JAN x | Written by LynB (435 comments posted) 25th November 2006 | This is beautiful - and I must admit it brought a tear to my eye. I am attending the funeral of a much loved family member in a week's time, and I am seriously considering printing this off, and giving it to his wife. Welcome to the boards - you have a very special gift. |
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