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Partington Pete
By maipenrai
06 June 2005

Pete is an ex-soldier, Falklands, Gulf War, N.Ireland, UN Peackeeping etc, etc,etc

Centrepoint did a survey some years back on people living on the street in London, one of findings was that a high percentage of homeless males were ex-military, a National Disgrace


Partington Pete

was a sad old man

at fifty four

and he used to pray

Lord how he used to pray

Lord end it now

take me to your blessed side

for I am a sinner Lord

I am a sinner

 

Now Pete

he liked a drink

many a two or more

and at times Pete

well,he did not know who he was

where he was going or

where he had been

and at times like this, well

Pete he would pray

Lord take me away

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liked this
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 6th June 2005
not for kids although it started simply 
set me thinking 
there could be more verses 
and i would enjoy more of them
liked this
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 7th June 2005
Thanks Kevin.lad you liked it and take on board your comments 
Bernie
Partington Pete
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 11th June 2005
Very well written maipenrai - your words depict the mental suffering of soldiers - A shame we have to write about such things - better that they had never happened, but this will make others think. Ladybird.
thanks
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 12th June 2005
thanks Ladybird for your comments
your voice is clear
Written by alandavidpritchard (58 comments posted) 16th June 2005
Maipenrai 
 
Again, your economic style conveys much punch, and your voice is clearly dicernable. The truths you convey are not shouted, yet their impact is loud and clear. 
You demonstrate with considerable ease, the power of unadorned poetry.

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