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Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
See if I try and submit to an acrostic poetry competition after reading this!
Dammit, Oli, I wouldn't even have known this was acrostic if you hadn't pointed it out.
Off to try and drown my envy in a cup of hot mint tea. |
Flattery!
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
Will get you everywhere with me! But methinks you over-egg this pudding Mary! 'Tis but a trivial ditty composed on the loo. I'm sure you could do much better, why not have a go?
Until this morning I thought acrostic was a type of embroidery!
Thanks again for your kindness
Oli |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
And I thought it was an angry branch.... poor, poor joke.
In this, the quality of the words disguise the word spelled vertically. Simple verse but very evocative. Wouldn't the vertical word normally be associated with the theme of the poem?
Enjoyed very much.
All the best,
Phil. |
very evocative for me...
Written by JourneyAtNight (318 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
Just beautiful. Its interesting that you see this piece as a "trivial ditty", because I liked this more than anything I've read on the poetry board lately. I don't know, it's probably just a perosnal response, but it really did take me to one of my trips to the coast, where my "careless dreams" are dreamt the most!
Echoing what Phil said though, I thought that the vertical line was meant to correlate with the rest...
Nevertheless, I liked this very much.
Best wishes,
JAN x |
Acrostic
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
Thanks Phil & Jan,
Perhaps you're right about the theme Phil, I was trying to be a bit clever just making it the form, rather than the theme.
Probably what you say is usual, but I can't find any rules about it. I'm not usually fond of this kind of "discipline" poetry, but it can be fun to try.
JAN - you are too, too kind. I still think it a bit of a poor effort, but there is my love of Tiree beaches in there, so it's not really trivial to me I suppose. Thanks for your comments, like a shot of pure encouragement to my feeble bloodstream.
See below for the acrostic guidance given:
For our New Arrival contest we are looking for Acrostic poems. Create a poem in which the first letter of each line spells out a word (downwards).
Here is an example of an Edgar Allan Poe poem titled simply "An Acrostic":
Elizabeth it is in vain you say
"Love not" ? thou sayest it in so sweet a way:
In vain those words from thee or L.E.L.
Zantippe's talents had enforced so well:
Ah! if that language from thy heart arise,
Breath it less gently forth ? and veil thine eyes.
Endymion, recollect, when Luna tried
To cure his love ? was cured of all beside ?
His follie ? pride ? and passion ? for he died
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Written by ellipinnock (1784 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
This left me with a big smile across my face (a lovely antidote to a saturday morning spent in work). I would agree with Phil that, in this case, the fact that its' acrostic doesn't add to the poem. No matter, I liked it very much, I'm feeling all zen now 
Elli |
Written by Fledermaus (3482 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
| Sandals, beach? It's november! Nice poem. |
Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 25th November 2006 |
loved the last two lines..something gentle and forgiving about it. Gives you a sense of renewed faith in yourself and in the environment around you. I've had an awful week and this was a comforting read..
thank you
Fran |
Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 1st December 2006 |
stop rhyming so well or I may have to take evasive action! *brandises cattel rod*
nice one oli
x clo x |
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Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 1st December 2006 |
| *cattle prod |
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