no pleasing some
here’s how it goes:
you buy, cart home, prepare;
you put it on a plate – and serve
they look, they sniff
but they’re not having it,
wrinkle their noses, shake their heads.
-- you tip it in the bin.
okay, you say, i’ll figure out a way
to tempt that palate, make you eat
what i have got to give
you get a book,
you read,
you chop, you roast, you fry --
and serve it on a plate.
they look, they sniff
and leave it there untouched.
-- you tip it in the bin.
this time, you swear,
you’ll make those taste buds soar!
you’ll show them all
your expertise:
you get another book –
-- a better one --
go to a fancy store and buy;
you dice, you snip, you fricassee –
long story short?
--you tip it in the bin.
what can i do?
will they eat my own flesh?
shall i serve up my heart,
my liver on a china dish?
will they eat that?
what if they won’t?
should i get in the bin?
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Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 26th November 2006 |
Put me off my Sunday roast! My family always ate the pattern off the plate - so I can't really relate to this fussiness. Well written and amusing though as always! Just take them to McDonalds, or buy Campbells "Meat" Balls - "The Meat They're Sure to Eat" Oli |
A captial poem! Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3559 comments posted) 26th November 2006 |
oops I'm still giggling at Talisker's reply. OK well I suppose only a poet would agonise over capitals. I'm afraid that sort of thing goes right over my head but I liked the content; very funny and made me smile. Short, sharp and funny ticks all the boxes for me with or without Capitals cheers J |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 26th November 2006 |
You have my sympathies on this. I'm starting to get militant now, 'Eat it or make your own,' I say. My parents wouldn't have called that militant, just soft. Their line was, 'Eat it or starve.' We ate it. I wonder how all this food fussiness ties in with other 'youth' themes. Is it all part of the modern/post modern/post-post modern way of looking for something totally your own? I don't think a lot of kids are happy to 'make do' if they know there are other things that they want. In some ways I admire that. They should achieve more. Expectations in my family were low - so were my own. Now everyone wants to make it to the top. But is there room? Bloody hell. Fussy eaters to youth aspiration. Liked your poem. I normally like to see things properly punctuated, but as you wrote almost in note form, the unconventional setting out suited the unconventional style. All the best, Phil. |
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 27th November 2006 |
Although I am indeed irritated no end with my kids' endlessly changing palates, I actually used the finicky kid and the despairing parent as a metaphor for the rejected writer and the picky editor/agent (or instead of 'picky' I should perhaps say 'discriminating' -- I'm sure they would). I rewrite endlessly, polish, rewrite, edit, polish, submit. Back it comes. 'Ending not strong enough.' 'Good strong ending, but beginning needs re-working' (for the same story!!); 'Good images, good writing, but it doesn't tell us anything;' 'Some nice use of irony here, but no message.' Actually, those are the rejection letters I LIKE -- at least they give me reasons. The ones that make me weep are 'Thank you for your interest -- this is not for us.' Sigh. Thank you for your comments, everyone! |
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