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The things carried in by the river

By HardLines

26 November 2006

A visit to notes from 2000

The things carried in by the river
Twisted, wrecked and waterlogged.

Punished and tumbled by the flood.

Left to decorate places beyond mind.

Beyond intention.

A summer love-seat, forlorn and rusted in the branches
Stranded by forces long past and spent.

Scraps of iron, scraps of life
Lie unrecognised haphazard on the bank.

Turned and broken, bruised and rolled, ripped and battered by the river.

The waters boil high and dark in these few days after the rains
pushing down from hill and field

To sweep all before them in a drowning midnight roar.

My blue fingers grasp
and strain to hold their grip.

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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 26th November 2006

Your debut piece?

Really liked it. Very immediate piece for me. Loved this line:

Turned and broken, bruised and rolled, ripped and battered on the river.

But perhaps by the river?

The last two lines suggest different possibilities.

For me - an effective piece. Look forward to more.

Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 26th November 2006

The last three lines puzzled me a little. But it's a nice poem which flowed well.

Written by HardLines (5 comments posted) 27th November 2006

Thanks both.

Good edit Phil : I've incorporated "by" as suggested.
The last two lines originated in another river-inspired piece. I may revisit them at some point and see if they can be made to flow more easily.

regards

HL

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 27th November 2006

I love Fledermaus's pun! Intentional?

And I love this poem, pure and simple. It says something, and it says it well. Love those last lines -- keep hanging on.

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