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A Summer's day
By Heidi
27 November 2006
A more lighthearted piece.  Enjoy!!


As I sit beside my window looking at the morning sun
And all the people milling round on a day that's just begun.
The warmth, it penetrates the glass and absorbs into my skin
I close my eyes and lift my head to immerse myself within.
The people all in vest tops and lightly coloured skirts,
Or shorts with leather sandals and airy linen shirts,
Are laughing in the sunshine while eating their ice-cream,
The birds are also singing, it's like a summer's dream!
There's children playing football and girls with skipping ropes.
They should be wearing sunscreen, you'd think they were, one hopes!
But, something interrrupts my thoughts, I hear a buzzing sound.
The people are all fading  as I slowly come around.
I gently open up my eyes and glance over at the clock.
It's 6am and I hit snooze to delay the morning shock.
The heating's not kicked in yet but my bed is nice and warm,
The cat is sleeping on my feet as usual, true to form!!
I didn't close my curtains and I can see that it's quite dark.
The frost is glistening on the roofs and the trees are fairly stark.
I hate the dreary winter and the lack of morning light,
But what a lovely dream I had and what a lovely night!

Reviews

Written by peeano1 (86 comments posted) 27th November 2006
Very nice. Reminds me of daylight/summerish type mood. Flow was smooth and calm. You have lots of rhymes that makes everything go together. Overall, this is good and I hope to read more of your writing. :)

Written by JourneyAtNight (318 comments posted) 27th November 2006
Lovely! It paints a nice picture. And as above, it casts a bright and summery atmosphere! 
 
Best wishes, 
 
Esra :)
Lovely
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 27th November 2006
This is lovely Heidi, and you have painted such a nice picture. You must live on the opposite side of the world to me because winter's striking here. I could only add one little comment: It would be much better split into four line verses.

Written by Heidi (3 comments posted) 28th November 2006
Thanks for your reviews...funnily enough it was first written as four line verses and then went back and changed it .. ha ha !!! It was written while at work hence the description of winter as being dull ;)

Written by Clifftown (642 comments posted) 28th November 2006
Mmm...could almost taste the ice cream! :)  
 
Really liked this lovely cheery poem, even though I'm reading it while it's dark and rainy outside!

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