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Unburdened Too - (375 words)
By wattle
28 November 2006
wattle - no one special, just a dreamer who found an old pen.
K104 B-double

The coroners report returned a closed verdict. It explained how she had stopped at the intersection for some time waiting for a break in the heavy north flowing traffic. She had driven forward and slowed to slot in behind a north bound approaching Semi-Trailer and while doing so had quite innocently positioned her vehicle in the path of a fully laden B-double traveling south at one hundred kilometers per hour. Her small compact was carried eighty meters down the road by the impact. Death would have been instant. The truck drivers traveling in both directions testified that she had been looking south and appeared not have seen or heard the approaching B-double even though the driver had sounded the air horn and was braking heavily. Both truck drivers, although physically uninjured, were disturbed by the accident and required hospitalization over night, suffering from shock. There was nothing the truck driver could have done to avoid the accident.

The coroner noted from expert witness testimony, had the B-double involved in the accident not been a fully roadworthy K104 Kenworth the accident might have been much worse. The vehicle exhibits remarkable stability under heavy breaking and while its low front paneling would have caused more damage to her vehicle, the truck was able to pull up in a straight line without jackknifing or catapulted into the oncoming traffic, and therefore causing several more vehicles to become seriously involved.

Holding back the tears he read the finding one more time, before placing it into an envelope with the letter he had just written. It had explained the pain of living alone this last 12 months; how he had cuddled the vacant pillow and cried every night; how he had no one to share his sorrow and the memory of growing up in the orphanage with his lifelong sole mate; how they had moved into their own flat the day they were both seventeen. How they had both never known another lover; how they had learned intimacy together.

He kissed the envelope addressed to himself and deposited it in the post box on the corner.
 
Not wishing to be hurtful, he placed the car in gear and moved forward into the path of the approaching K104 B-double.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3459 comments posted) 28th November 2006
"fully roadworthy K104 Kenworth "- I want one. I want one, mind you they look longer than some of our motorways here in England. I thought this was a short and effective story which sort of carries on after it's finished( if you know what I mean) I'm sure if you wanted to top yourself one of those monsters would do the job. I just hope it wasn't the same poor driver again 
cheers 
J
Selfish driver!
Written by Fledermaus (3456 comments posted) 28th November 2006
I think your main character is rather selfish: Causing another driver a lifelong trauma! 
 
At first I was wondering where this was going to, as the first two paragraphs show the suitable cold and overly complicated style of a bureaucrat's letter. 
 
Luckily you then got to the human side. 
The third paragraph is perhaps a bit too short, but I can understand why all this information had to be squeezed into so little text. I realy don't know what you could have done about that. 
 
An interesting, but strange story.

Written by Phil (6851 comments posted) 28th November 2006
A bit of an oddity this one Wattle. Well enough written, but a bit cold for me. Clever in its symmetry, but no human warmth. There's almost some humanity with the letter - but it's addressed to himself. 
 
Perhaps this was intentional. If so, I can't work out why. 
 
Fledermaus raises a good point, poor semi driver - again. 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 28th November 2006
You got to stop with the teasing business! I quite liked this but it felt a bit like a literary doodle for you. Do you do requests? 
 
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