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Poetry
Too Frozen
By chocomallow
28 November 2006

Silently
I walk with the ice-cold wind
Biting my skin like vampires embrace flesh
I begin to question myself
Manic voices kick in
To the quiet bangs of my heart
Brains huddle together
Too frozen for rational thoughts
Ignoring the world
In silence
I walk on

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Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 28th November 2006
Sorry this could entirely be my stupidity. PLease forgive if that's the case. 
 
Got a bit lost half way through this. You're alone. 'Brains' - plural. Are these the brains that belong to the voices you hear. But then all the voices, different personalities maybe, but the voices themselves come from the same brain - or not? Is this just about being cold, or more? I read it as if it was - almost - but then changed my mind. 
 
Too dense Phil.

Written by Talisker (1321 comments posted) 29th November 2006
How many brains have you? Less than one I'll wager! 
 
Too frozen? If you are cryogenically disadvantaged then you will be dead young person, too cold perhaps, not too frozen surely! 
 
Not dense Phil! There is no hidden message here - just an ill considered group of words. 
 
Try,try again! 
 
Oli 
 
 
 
 
 

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